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You are Alone

Cling to death, Darleen,
as the clouds go by,
and every flash of memories
the lightning bolt that lights them
as they roll.
Flashing back like movie rolls,
animated lies stuck on repeat.

Breathe it in, Darleen,
feel the cold grey sky envelope you,
birds that wail lullabies
through lonely nights that never seemed to end.
That one diffusing light bulb
that couldn’t wipe the stars from your eyes still,
swinging through your sorrow
as you clutched your knees
and sung inside your head.

The silence made you feel the more alone.

And here you stand, Darleen,
waiting still, wait for that which never comes,
wind that tugs the ears of corn
and yet they never hear a sound.
You heard it all, Darleen,
Each gentle footstep
click of lock
and handle turn.
As the shadows start to sharpen
and your wits began to dull,
still you stand, Darleen,
turn your back into the darkness
face the light.
Embrace the sorrow
you have felt so very long.
He’s not coming, Darleen,
I think you’ve known it all along,


You are alone.

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  • My Last Breath.x
    November 24, 2007

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    This is amazing. I love the way you made it seem you're talking to someone..Darleen..Whether it's a real person, or not. Love it!

    Good luck in the contest!


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    October 21, 2007

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    excellent poem congrats on th previously won trophies good luck in this contest here is my favorite part
    Breathe it in, Darleen,
    feel the cold grey sky envelope you,
    birds that wail lullabies
    through lonely nights that never seemed to end.
    That one diffusing light bulb
    that couldn’t wipe the stars from your eyes still,
    swinging through your sorrow
    as you clutched your knees
    and sung inside your head.


  • LittleAnn
    October 2, 2007

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    Excellent...

    You have so much wonderful imagery in this piece, I enjoyed reading this poem immensely!

    I love, love, love this!

    Keep up the fantastic work!!
    Annie


  • xxlisajazminexx
    September 30, 2007

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    nicely done!

    i love each line and i adored the end......
    very heart tugging and an overall wonderful write!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! thank you for entering into my contest!


  • LadyDementia gold member
    September 30, 2007
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    This was a powerful piece, best of luck in the contest.


  • wolfcub
    September 12, 2007

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    This has lods of meaning and is really poewrful and deep and wonderful!
    Thankyou for entering and good luck in my contest.
    Katie


  • Classic Crayons
    August 30, 2007
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    How about WAIT?

    I really liked this the entire thing was rich with wordy meanings and a deeper kind of deadened loss.
    Shiny sad.


  • Lowell Poe
    August 29, 2007

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    FLASH BACK

    THAT MAY BE A GOOD TITLE, or. Darleen's Darkness...or take a line from the poem....EMBRACE THE SORROW...or
    AS THE CLOUDS GO BY.... BUT I LIKE YOURS ALSO.
    THIS MADE ME FEEL, so it is art to me. Believing in love that never shows to save you. So sad. WELL DONE LASSIE.
    Thank you for your way to kind words on my work. Please feel free to read more, as i will do the same.My grand mother used to say......LOWELL!!!

    WRITE SOMETHING GRAND.
    FOR YOU MAY BE ENTERTAINING ANGELS,
    UNAWARE.

    I think I may have done just that.

    PEACE AND BLESSINGS ALWAYS,
    LOWELL POE


  • LadysDragon
    August 10, 2007
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    Great Job

    Wow,is inspiried by a real person?Thank you for entering and good luck


  • xCandieKissesx
    August 3, 2007

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    This is very well written. Good imagery in this one. It is clever and creative. Bravo! Best of wishes to you in the contest!
    Jackie ♥


  • SpokenSilence
    August 1, 2007

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    This Is amazing. Its really well written.
    Its very emotional, and has a great flow.
    Great Imagery.

    Great job, And Much Luck In Both Contests.

    xx SpokenSilence


  • DefinitiveFreak silver member
    July 30, 2007

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    Really beautiful. This was really beautiful. So heartfelt and true. The belladonna lily intrigues me, I'm gonna have to find a picture of one!


  • Silent Cougar Moderators member
    July 28, 2007

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    An amazing piece my friend, full of imagery, thought and feelings.
    I like this one a lot, and can see it has been put together very well.
    Keep writing like this and you will soon have a page full of well earned trophies. Well done.

    As for the title, as is, doesn't need changing at all.


  • SummerlandRayne gold member
    July 27, 2007

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    Actually I love that the title is repeated at the end of the poem! I loved this...it is just magnificent. It is filled with deep emotion and so much imagery! Your words touched me deeply and the poem is so totally perfect! Thanks so much!
    Blessings,
    Love~
    Azlyn

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