I lay before you, drink me with your eyes
L isten as your heart beats in torrents, thoughts
O f me driving you to distraction, wild
N ote the scent of my aroma, as it cascades through you
G ift wrapped loosely in silk, feel the pressure multiply
T ensing pleasure builds, listen as I whisper sweet nothings
O h, how I sigh as you drink of my splendor, plunging deep inside
B rings memories flooding back, memories
E scape me of climactic times passed,
I ntrinsic trails of seduction, of tongue and silk race through my mind
N ow we've reached that single moment,
A s you feed upon me satisfy your hunger, my
N erves reduced to ripples of ecstasy , breaths
D eepen,
P ulse quickens, restrained no marks are left
A s satin holds tight
R elinguishing myself,
T houghts are left behind, memories that where
O nce recalled in the night, losing myself in you, I
F ind myself walking a fine line between unrestricted images of
Y ou and what is real, could this be the start
O f our
U topia?
Author notes
Longing For U by My-key
Acrostic
Onesugar
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3237042
A contest entry
- Delightful Erotic Give And Take by delightfulmess.
450 points, ended August 9, 2007, 5 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Make me go "ooh!!"...(Adults Only)-Prewrites Welcome! by Daizy21.
450 points, ended October 13, 2007, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Make me write again!!! by Mykeee.
2000 points, ended December 1, 2008, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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LOL!! O my darling - a great acrostic piece. you are so creative thank you Sweetness
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good to see you Lovable 
A pleasure, anything to get you writing again. Been a long time 
Love ~sweetness~
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Hot & Steamy Indeed!
Great imagery coupled with a smooth flow...great job! -
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Thank you very much, I value & appreciate you reading
~sugar~
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WONDERFUL
STUNNING WRITING AND MUCH LUCK IN THIS CONTEST. I LOVE IT. WONDERFULLY-WRITTEN WITH SUCH PASSION AND EMOTION. THE WORDS FLOW FREELY HERE SUCH SEDUCTION MAKES THE READER READ ON. BRILLIANT PIECE
WAYNE
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good luck in this contest this is what i admire about my michelle you a power drive and stop at nothing i guess when my state of mind get back in to the swing of things i will join a contest but a lot of the contest individuals piss me off you know i am tempered so any way this was a very steamy piece and it is a winner in my eyes babes ~ jewels ~
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loved this piece
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~fanning self~ suddenly got so hot in here
WoW both writes are amazing
Thank you for entering
delila
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Your comments are welcomed and appreciated
I am glad you enjoyed it.
Hugs onesugar
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EROTICA WRITTEN FORM THE HEART AND SOUL IS SO DAMN HOT!
You sound like a woman who is falling in love, Baby -and your poetry is getting sweeter and more sensual by the day as your desire to put out the fire and start a new one is ignited! This had me excited and yopu know how, Miss Michelle. Could it be that my erotuc poetry has awoken the hot and sultry - and wild and wicked tigress in you! GOOD LUCK in the contest with this.
OH LOOK? Here come three horny fellows who had to JERK OFF after reading this sweet and sensual piece and if they said they didn't they are lying!
Peace & Love!
Earl.
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My Swtpoetry man you have got a lot
to answer too.
Hugs onesugar
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fantastic
ok now my first read was such a great write, i loved how it flowed and the images it gave me
the second time i read as an acrostic i felt the time and energies used to craft this,
marvelous write and i thind it is the best acrostic i have ever ever read.
god luck
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Thank you al for your words
they mean a lot.
Hugs onesuagr
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wow this was a cherry on top writing here sweets. i bet my whole savings account you strike gold are silver with this are the judge just dont have great skills in recieving such passion as you give in this masterpiece nice write dear
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Julia
thank you for your words as always
I value your thoughts.
Hugs onesugar
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Wow
This is perfect. I love the wiritng style. This is a great piece!Enjoyed it very much. Thanks for sharing such a piece.Good Luck!
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I appreciate your comments
Glad you enjoyed it
Hugs onesugar
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Nailed it
Wow - i live the fact that you use an acrostic form and still able to convey the full picture. I love this verse
A s you feed upon me satisfy your hunger, my
N erves reduced to ripples of ecstasy , breaths
D eepen,
Nerves reduced to ripples - what an intense realistic image and feeling. ~ great piece and good luck ~ my-key
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MIKeeeeeeeeee,
If I hadn't been checking out your AP page
this would not of come about,
there was just something about longing for u
so thank you for writing that.
Hugs onesugar
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Deeply sublime, Sugar
What a wonderful picture you painted of two lovers, so entangled in their minds that they don't know where fantasy ends and reality takes over.
"O nce recalled in the night, losing myself in you, I
F ind myself walking a fine line between unrestricted images of
Y ou and what is real, could this be the start
O f our
U topia?"?
Yes, yes, that's it, it could be the start of utopia!
Wonderfully written my sweetness, I loved it.
Love you,
Brazos
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Oh brazos,
wonderful you
thank you for your wonderful comment
Love you
Hugs onesugar
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