Dear Martin,
I'm attempting to find a reason to stay,
Why'd you turn away?
Why didn't you listen to what i had to say?
Sometimes i get the feeling, you don't feel like me,
And other times i feel you know,
So i'll shout out loud and clear,
i was left to die there,
Waiting for the last tear,
Hoping you could hear,
Sometimes i get the feeling you don't care,
And other times i feel like there's hope,
So i'll shout out loud and clear,
I'm sick of waiting for you!
You probably don't feel like you used too,
And you know, I don't care if you do!
Sometimes i get the feeling that i'll be just fine,
And other times i think i'll miss you,
So i'll shout out loud and clear,
You don't treat me like you should,
If you had the heart to care you could,
And if i had the heart to let you go i would,
Sometimes i feel like you're holding me back,
And other times i feel like i need you,
So i'll say it soft and say it slow,
I need you,
And i love you too,
And i don't want to go on without you...
Confused and let down,
Me
Author notes
06/30/07
A contest entry
- Not the one for me! by Procrastination.
450 points, ended July 31, 2007, 29 entries
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Honorable mention
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I think its amazing.. Its full of raw emotions.. It came right from your heart. Beautifully write.. Loved it!
-Mrs.Classix
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Um...good emotion.
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Wow - this is so full of emotion. Thank you for entering!
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truth in and of itself. i've never really understood how someone knows completely for certain how they feel about someone. and here you are honest and forthright about it. good job!
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This was a very good poem. Thank you for entering it in my contest. I really enjoyed reading it. Thanks!
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"So i'll shout out loud and clear,
You don't treat me like you should"
You conveyed your emotions brilliantly throughout this but I loved those lines. Your feeling were passionate and powerful!
Goodluck in the contest!
Much love,
Emily x
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Aww hun I love it!!! Great job, i luv it. and martins a prick, but u love him alot, and it doesnt sound forced, im totally showing him.
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Whoa...that was pretty! Your writing's good Gin, just as good as I remember it! So, is this guy real? Sounds like you really are speaking from the heart. Of course you can do that even if you don't really know them but...okay, I'll shut up now lol! Keep it up babe.
Luvs,
Hannah
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