I lay in my bed,
Remembering you.
Before I sleep at night,
I remember you.
When I dream at night,
I dream of you.
Knowing there is nothing I can do
But to remember you.
But when I wake in the morning,
I feel your body beside mine.
When I look over
I realize all I feel is the heaviness of time.
To know your love,
To know your touch,
To know your heart.
It hurts so very much.
To remember your kiss,
To remember your smile,
To remember your beautiful eyes.
Makes my heart want to whither
As it dies.
And this heartbreak hurts all the while.
Just from remembering your smile.
How can i tell you my feelings,
When I know yours are so far gone?
I love you, but why do I hurt?
I love you, but why do I cry?
I love you, but it seems I have given up
Never agian to try.
Why have I screamed
When everything seemed so lost?
Am I such an outcast
That your family desides my fate?
I dont understand,
You make me feel weak,
From all the nights I have cryed myself to sleep.
Are our feelings so fake
That they leave such a bitter taste?
Like a poison coursing through my system,
Intoxicating me,
Tearing me,
Ripping me,
Hurting me,
Fueling me,
Until I am so past gone.
I have tried to remain strong
But with every step I falter.
With every breath I take,
I continue to gasp for air.
Never agian for it to come.
When you left, my happiness whithered away,
Into the deepest shadows of my soul.
I Love You,
And there is nothing I can do
But continue to feel for you.
A contest entry
- MY FIRST CONTEST: I WANT LOVE RIGHT NOW. PREWRITES ALLOWED...COME IN AND CHECK OUT by the-gifted.
600 points, ended September 26, 2007, 108 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Looking For Ap Family by TheLostGirl.
525 points, ended October 23, 2007, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything Goes.......But it has to have emotion by Nikki Rowles.
450 points, ended March 17, 2008, 70 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Invite Only Contest [For Nighttime Angel's Favorites Only] by Nighttime angel.
1410 points, ended March 29, 2008, 68 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything goes....the second time... by Nikki Rowles.
600 points, ended June 13, 2008, 73 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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SAying goodbye often enough, helps lesson the pain. Writing about it helps as well. We have all been there, it sucks when it is fresh and raw. Why do we love, if it causes so much pain? Wonderful poem! ~Sie
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very sad
the pain and heartache in this write from you is so very sad. yet, it is something that i am certain far too many people will be able to relate to when the read it. thank you for sharing this with me today. i am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. congratulations on the honorable mention that you received in this contest. viyanna rosemarie
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Hands down, worth gold
This poem is beautiful. If I have to find one poem on this site that describes me down to the T...especially right now in my life right now this is it:
"To remember your kiss,
To remember your smile,
To remember your beautiful eyes.
Makes my heart want to whither
As it dies.
And this heartbreak hurts all the while.
Just from remembering your smile."
I feel it all, my eyes have been a fountain for the last 7 months of my life, feeling all of these emotions that you have described all so clearly.
My favourite line:
"Am I such an outcast
That your family decides my fate?
I don't understand"
I have felt this exact way in my life...and I still do. The one I love and I are separated because of such a fact.
Keep up the brilliant writing and form. Thank you for blessing us with such a piece. 10/10. Simple.
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Very emotional, very sad. For me, the errors in it detracted from my enjoyment of the read.
You caught well /the emptiness of time/ and /so past gone/.
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sad...almost to the emo level. very emotional, very visceral. One small thing...you spelled "falter" wrong (faulter is what you have there)
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This is a great poem. It is truly deserving of the gold cup that you got. I throroughly enjoyed reading it.
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your words flow from a broken heart and pull the tears from deep within...to have love and then to have lost so difficult to go on...sighs...wishing you love and happiness
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very emotional...i can relate to those feelings..."am i such an outcast that your family decides my fate"...and the feeling of them being right beside you.
excellent description of heartache. great write =)
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Good, emotional write
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I wake to feel your body beside me, but when I look over I realsise, all I feel is the emptiness of time. That's so real. You caught a lot of emotions in this poem. It's painful and sad, and lingers in your mind. Very good write.
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Ok...well written....nice flow....very wellwritten check back...I'mnot adding to finalist yet....
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this poem is filled with some very strong & very intense feelings... I can feel the pain as I read this.. I hung on every line that you wrote.. heartache is painful, love isn't all rosy red, there is a lot of pain intertwined with love.. you expressed your emotions quite well this poem outstanding job on this.. I hope that the heartache soon goes away for you..
thank you for entering & good luck
kat
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LONG...although you have written longer....you having fun bugging morgann over there?
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This Is Awesome
This poem is just amazing. I like your style and it is outstanding. I feel like I need to practice and get better at writing so that I can get to your level. Keep writing and I'll keep reading.
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very heartfelt and sad, beautiful poem
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wow, this was really good. Great job on this piece. It was beautifully written and strong!
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loved it
that was a amzing and powerful.
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A sad but wonderful piece you have
penned here. I love all of the emotions
and honesty in this. Well done, good luck
to you in the contest, and thanks a lot
for sharing it here!
Jeremy0826 -
I love this piece. I feel your pain of losing someone you care so much for. Keep up the wonderful work.
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Such a sad poem filled with many emotions I enjoyed reading it though. It is written well... Keep up with the excellent penning
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so filled with anguish and love...hurt and sorrow all mixed together. good job and thanks for sharing it with the group.
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This is truly an amazing & heartbreaking poem you have here. May God bless you in all that you write and do and best wishes to you and your poem in this contest.
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What a heart wrenching sad piece, I feel your pain. A beautifully recorded and emphasised piece in my opinion.xx
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This is so beautiful it has such a loving nature to it. thank you for sharing. this with me and entering my contest
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awwwww you are soo good at writeing i think that i could read your poetrys all day lol
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i am sooo sorry that this happened to you.......maybe you just need to look for the right girl. i am having a hard time finding a man that wont beat me!!!
Diamond
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aww that is so sweet. great piece. thanks for entering and good luck in my contest.
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I'm Sorry
I can only hope that the pain you felt when writing this has subsided a little bit. I'm am glad, however, that you did get a heartfelt poem out of this experience. And I hope your wounds are healing as quickly as possible:] AmyW
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