Guilt fell upon the shoulders
of a curious young girl
her mind was being sliced
into microscopic pieces
just waiting to be thrown away
while deep maroon incisions placed gently on her arms
tell the story of her world
Being told about the hatred of being in love
held her tight around her waist
trying to escape became a difficult place
the only thing that assured her
was the barrier she was not allowed to cross
yet to her own, she felt it as a loss
Love fell on the dirt floor in front of her
she then collapsed too
it had not hit her yet, what she had been through
her love for another female
had become a nightmare in reality
a figure of her mother appeared to be close by
she scrambled to her now bruised feet
awaiting the punishment of defeat
the girl
not old in age
now lie breathless
on the ground below her body
she had payed her debt for falling in love
she had covered her tracks from the earth
she had dealt with the discrimination
of her own family, the people who are meant to care
but falling in love with another girl
she wouldn't dare
Author notes
OPTION FOUR
CONTEST OPTION: TITLES
USERNAME: MYBEAUTYISFAKE
MY NAME: CHELSEY
A contest entry
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This can mean many different things, to different people. To me, it means something personal.
Comments
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I found this incredibly sad. It makes me think of a couple (female) friends of mine. good girls who have to deal with ignorance and intollerance on a daily basis. Great write!
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i feel the pain, this is a very emotional piece, great write
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Great write about discrimination and the fear and pain it causes. I really like the title you chose for it, too.
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This is really a great poem, this is a lot of deep emotion and it is very well written. Good job, keep writing.
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I absolutely love this poem and i can relate. The love of my life is a female and i hate the fact that we have to face discrimination everyday. Just because we are strong enough to admit that we love eachother and gender doesn't matter. Great Job!
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"Guilt fell apon the shoulders"
Is a nice image that I usually wouldn't associate with guilt. It usually seems to be something that infects the mind, but here you give it personification that is strong and also delicate. Lovely. :] -
"while deep maroon incisions" I never knew something i hate so much could be put so poetic, well done. It is hard and it hurts when love falls apart or when you end up getting hurt by love.
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wow............ 0.0
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WOW
as simple as that:wow
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Sorry, this isn't what we're looking for. Nice try though.
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Being in love with someone of the same gender isn't a bad thing. We all love who we love and nobody, NOBODY should tell us that we can't love someone. To be harassed and pestered because of it is ridiculous and wont make you change your mind, as it's not about changing the mind, it's natural. I think you have to be strong and fight against the odds. Just know that if you love someoen, that's worth more than anything else in the world.
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whoa
i really like this
i can tell theres alot of emotion put into this!
good job
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this is very good.
i like this lots. =DDD
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Wow, so very sad.
WOw!
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OMG!!! That is very emotional. I am so glad my mom can accept the fact I am a lesbian because at least I know I have someone I can turn to. This poem just has left me speechless. Nicely done. I enjoyed this one a lot. Thanks for entering and good luck to you in the contest.
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I <33333 it hun! keep up the fab work.
Your lovin AP sis
Savvy
oxox
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a good write. Sad but well written. thanks for this entry. take care, Sam (Dreams27) xxx
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absolutly loved this! good luck in the contest.
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Incredible!!!
That was awesome!! You're 15 yrs old, right? You have a true gift!! I'm adding you to my favorites list!!
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this is a wonderful piece taht i would love to use. please put your name in the author's notes or put anonymous! thanks
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Great piece!!
wow!! what a great piece i loved it. you did a great job with this one. i am very pleased
thank you for entering my contest and good luck.
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This is a pretty good write. The rhythm and flow is mostly consistent, and the sadness of the imagery is extrememly powerful, making it a very readable piece. It is very sad, that is true, but a grwat write nonetheless.
SaintJimmy
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i like this on as i strikes a chord, in my prsonal life, good write
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omg
wow
this was so sad
and such an amazing write
i hope you have a good life
don't let other people bring you down
love is an amazing thing and experience as long as your heart is fully in it
it doesnt matter the race, sex, or anything
love is love
:]
♥♥♥
B
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Beautiful piece
There is so much bittersweet anguish in this piece. It invokes a feeling of sympathy...and admiration for being able to hold up in such a devastating situation. Well done!
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oh. i love this.
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very nice. very very nice.
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i understand.
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interesting. this poem has a very strong message. the imagery and emotions and stuff were really good. thank you for entering and good luck
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Wow
Very well done. You are how old? Going on twenty one.
Any way nice write. Can we pick who we fall for? It's an old question.
Joe
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thank you =]
im fifteen.
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