No murders are recorded
No lives are tragically lost.
It is always summer here
There is no winter frost.
Terrorists are nowhere in site
In this place of bliss.
Happiness is all around
Like a gentle kiss.
Alcohol does not exist
And neither do drugs.
This place is peaceful, gentle, calm
Who ever heard of thugs?
Children run and play outside
Without any fear.
Child molesters, sex offenders
Don't have a place here.
Where is this world I speak of,
A world away.
You didn't think it was here...did you?
You would have to be insane!
Author notes
Otption 5- I really strongly believe that the world is falling and falling fast...and something needs to be done..
THis is Option #1....it shows how bad this world is getting....
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I really wish this world existed.
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A lovely glimpse into what, to me, would be Utopia. It is a shame that such a place does not exist. It's a shame that there's no place for a children to live safely and peacefully; where parents don't have to live in fear of what may happen to their young if left un-attended.
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That was a very sad poem. I know it wasn't meant to be (or was it?) but just the fact that those things really do happen, and billions of people have to worry about that stuff every day is so sad. Parents have to worry about their kids walking home from school because of the 13 child molesters that live in town, a boy has to worry about his little sister doing drugs, or vice versa, it's just sad.
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I like your style!
Write on!
*PEACE*
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This is an unreal world of the past, where we could do and be all of those things, sadly those times are long gone and we are stuck in a world of self gratification and worth, fabulous write here, I thoroughly enjoyed this one
Karen -
This is an unreal world you speak of here. It was a well written poem, good flow and rhyme. Not sure the last line is at it's full potential though, it seems forced and making little sense. Thanks for entering.
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Hmm, yeah I guess you were right, our styles are quite similar, though I may go in a bit different direction than yours. I think that I am going to add you as a favorite
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this is by far the best I have seen Ale. You did a great job writing this. Two thumbs up for you Thanks for the read and keep writing like you do!!!!!!!!!!!!
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owch. that stingz.
how cruel to dangle such a world in eager faces...
anywho, when did you write this?
i absolutely love it.
i think itz once of your best.
awesomeness to the max like woah.
Peace
~Morgan
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Thanks. Yesturday at around midnight in like a half an hour. Yeah I love it too. Guess wut... I went over my fone bill by like $200. I'm in for it.
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