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is she the reason?

I stare at the girl on your arm, so this is her?
the one you say makes your mind go wild?

My replacement? Is this her?
The one you want to spend your life with?
The one you who made you forget about what we had?
Everything we did together, how much we cared.

Is this her? The one you talk about constantly?
The one that makes you forget about the past?
The one that makes you smile uncontrollably?

So shes it? She took my place?
She's the reason we don't talk?
The reasons you turn the other way when you see me?

Is she the reason that we can't be in the same room?
Is she the reason you can't say you miss me?
Is she the reason that you can't even say you love me?
Well tell me, is she the reason?
Is this her?

Author notes

love-lost....friends that dated and it ended...and he just forgot rule one dont date ur best friends it could end messy. Dont even think about it!! (it happened to me danyizzle10 (option 3)
this is the rewrite of it. thanks to someone who made it better..hope you don't mind lol
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Dani The Great

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  • EMOtionalDARKness17
    April 3, 2008
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    I just got out of a relationship and I still didn't get a reason to why he left and I did have a thought time to time come thinking if he found someone else and I donno. Really beautiful write I'm glad that I could relate to something so beautiful but yet so hurtful. If you need someone I would like to talk.


  • DJshy
    March 7, 2008
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    wow

    this is really good I like it it is wow


  • WillAlwaysLove silver member
    August 26, 2007
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    Thank you for entering, great write.


  • XInsanity-FairX
    August 22, 2007

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    wow this is amazing...it is so full of emotion...it's horrible how you can be so in love with someone and have it end so badly...having to watch them with someone else...and wonder if he says all the things to her that he sed to you...having to watch them together and wonderin if he still wants u...
    this was a truly an emotion peice and i think i can kinda relate to what you are talkin about....
    thank you for entering and good luck in my contest...
    xxx


  • XXDarkness-DecayXX
    August 19, 2007
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    good write...

    xoxo thanks for entering

  • trace3grls
    August 14, 2007
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    great write well done


  • juliex-exotic shine
    August 12, 2007

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    I love this, so much! It's so easy to relate to, and I think that's why I love it so much. It's so full of emotion and it's wonderfully written.
    [great.job&good.luck]
    x
    Julie


  • fallenangel1416
    August 7, 2007
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    omg! i feel the exact same way. my boyfriend dumped for my best friend and now he wont talk to me because SHE told him not to. i can relate because this is just like what im going through. this is a great piece of writing. so many of us have been in this same position.


  • Andii
    August 2, 2007
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    Ohmygod. This is beautiful. I nkow exactly how you feel. I love this, it's absolutly great. It's really deep and you can feel the emotion in it. It's very sad, but also kinda happy because you've moved on and even though it hurts alot, it's getting better. Anyways, GREAT write. ♠♣
    Andii


  • Ladysarrow
    July 31, 2007
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    God i think a lot of us have been there. You see someone you loved with someone new and you begin to wonder what that person has that you didn't. Who says you have to change anything about this poem? It's not perfect but it shows to me all the questions you were asking yourself as you stared at them. And I understand that perfectly.


  • February Moon gold member
    July 30, 2007
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    The emotion is good, but the way it is written could be better, the form seems sloppy to me. I really think that if you gave this piece some TLC it would be great. Thank you for entering, hope you understand me removing this, and good luck in the other contests.
    Chelsea


    • edit my world.
      July 30, 2007
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      Help!

      What could make this great. I can settle for good. But i would love to make it better..


  • Taxing Minds
    July 27, 2007
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    Great write and thanks for the entry.


  • oldphotosonlybringt
    July 26, 2007

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    ♥

    i loved it i loved it i loved..by da way i loved it...!!!

    kk really this was an amazing poem, i can so get cha on dis, thanks lots for entering it,

    love bunches..xoxox


  • Onerogueleft
    July 26, 2007

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    Powerful

    I really liked the suspensful build of the emotions and feelings leaving a strong residual afterglow. great read and tremendous story.

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