Do you know what goes on behind closed doors?
Seeing blood drip, Hit the floor
All the time, Tears are falling down
My smile always turns into a frown
Scars and cuts will pound and throb
What will you do when I'm finally gone?
Always with me you were there
But did you actually really care?
This knife will soon save me
Please just take me from my life long misery
I can no longer hold to live on
I can't stand those stupid love songs
I'm feeling dizzy from the pills I took
Please just come and take one look
Then maybe you will see
How bad I was hurting when you left me
I'm starting to lose my breath
Soon I'll come face to face with death.
Author notes
I wrote this before i went to work today and i hope that you will like it........
Please tell me what you think
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well written i love the emotion you put in this. its not forced at all, i like that, i can relate exactly.
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wow this is an amazing poem, I absolutly love this
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Very strong..lovely..
A few mistakes in your poem,
"close doors" don't you mean "Closed doors"?
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beautiful!!
wowww. this poem is so freaking strong and powerful. unfortunately, i can relate to it. but fortunately, you know that you are not alone. please dont give up, you have a beautiful and unusual talent for writing! im sure there are plenty of other girls out there who can relate/will be touched by this poem. i know i was. amazing job, keep it up! i hope to see some more of your work soon! :]
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a very srong worded piece. thanks for sharing. and hopfully the sun will brighten that which no one can.
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In this line:
"Seeing blook drip, Hit the floor"
Don't you mean "blood"?
In this line:
"Please just come and take on look"
It should be "one" and not "on".
I really like this. Especially the last two lines. The rhyming was really good. Btw - a little spelling/typing error in the last line. -
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Thank you for the comment and im glad you liked it.....keep reading and ill be sure to return the favor.....
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