Awaken by the dawn,
Avoiding my embrace
Needing to plead my love to you,
Slowly face to face
My thoughts remain melancholy,
A portion still in fear
But I can’t love you dearly until you realize I am here
We walk side by side,
Yet my existence seems unclear
Your acquaintances seem confused,
As if it’s you that disappeared
I scream from within you,
But it’s nothing that you hear
But I can’t love you dearly, until you realize I am here
The intimate times we shared,
Has faded like our affection
Its ripping me up inside,
What caused this hateful affliction?
The solitary periods between us,
This obstacle I can not steer
Of why I can’t love you dearly, until you realize I am here
But one day you will awaken,
To resume your daily routine
Realizing loving me is loving you,
Is the thing you seldom seen
And the image of your reflection
Will suddenly appear
That’s when I’ll love you dearly, when you see that I am here
Author notes
This was for a contest but I didn't get in it in time. Still, I hope it works
In a list
A contest entry
- Give Me Beauty ~ PIF~ by misticmoonlite.
475 points, ended September 19, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Go Deep! by LadyLavender.
550 points, ended October 5, 2007, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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such truth written in these words, which ever way you interpret it is sad. great write!
Tasha
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Written in such grace and touching style.
Beautiful picture and amazing poetry.
Beautiful talent, what a gift.
loveandblessings2u & yours always
Joyce
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Great job Mykeee, it definitely works! It seems our existence is a day-to-day thing, depending on who notices us, and who doesn't. And, often, we take our own selves for granted, and see no reflection of our being. But, eventually, we will be forced to see things as they are, be it good or bad. Hopefully, better times will spring again, and love will reign.
I loved the last line repitition, nice job.
Brazos
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The words that work a womans imagery are here rocking
the very soul of your readers. This one speaks loud, so many partners are in this same boat with a small hole taking on water while the sailor sinks one day at a time. This shows a man suffers too; even if he's smiling and fronting his ass off...........excellent write...Mom
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Thanks mom - no true words have been spoken. But Its a double entendre. One not knowing who you are as you live your life everyday, the other being with someone that refuse to acknowledge their existence. Love your sailor metaphor
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Oh yeah, it works!
One of my pet peeves with the women I dated was being taken for granted. As if I would always be there, just waiting. When some women go from dating assholes and finally hook up with a nice guy, they go overboard and just walk all over the nice gentleman. I've tossed a few of those aside. You penned a much greater sense of patience than I apparently have. Well done.
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If you threw them overboard, I hope no one found the bodies lol!!
But you are so right. Its sad because I hear there are no good men, but if you look in the wrong places you find wrong things. Good comments my friend. Thank U
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I have been here invisble to my partner, like I didn't exist, so I told him to leave because I am worth better. Very sad.
Luv ~sweetness~
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Thanks Sweetness. It does make life very hard and sometimes we have to make hard choices.
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Deep very deep and sad. I hope you got the girl.
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This was a double meaning poem. Basically a double entendre. One not knowing who you are as you live your life everyday, the other being with someone that refuse to acknowledge their existence.
Wanted to be creative. Thanks again Ms Sexy
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Just commenting again for the group, very sad indeed.
raingoddess -
Wonderful yet sad words you've penned here my dear friend, it is so true in your poem. Very deep.
CC♥
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Sad
This is a very sad, and deeply emotional poem, to live where you feel invisible to the one you love must be very hard, you wrote this very well adn you made me want to comfort you, excellent write, thank you for sharing and keep them coming.
raingoddess
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This is beautiful: Goes deep to describe relationships and what happens when certain (very important) components are missing:
what I love the most is the self-realization at the end.
Good luck and thank you for entering!
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This has been entered into a contest that only ends September 19
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Sorry - it was another poem I was refering to. Should have took that out
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If one can reflect and be proud of the accomplishments,then you succeeded in life,
you share life as gentle as you can good poem,nice flow,thanks for sharing, good luck in the contest MM
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many thanks for the kind words
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Self-love -- the most important. Who do we see when we look into a mirror?
"And the image of your reflection
Will suddenly appear
That’s when I’ll love you dearly,
when you see that I am here"
Great write poet! Enjoyed the read!
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Thanks so much forgeting it. I didn't want to write it too plain but not so complex either. Glad it worked ~ thanks again ~ Mykey
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