Like the Moon
A Silver moon shines
Down upon me
As I lay beneath the Stars
Where are you now
Can you See
My Heart is like the moon
Full of love and Peace
A Midnight Sky lays bare
No Moon or stars a light
As I lay upon the earth
Where are you now
Can you see
My Soul is like the Sky
Empty of you, with me
A Blood Red Moon
Is all I see
As I lay within the Bier
Where are you now
Can you see
My life is like the Moon.
A contest entry
- Anything by Madison Mary.
1000 points, ended August 2, 2007, 54 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Blow Me Away. by Dead Red Head.
400 points, ended November 5, 2008, 37 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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A bit repetitive for my taste but I like the imagery.
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Thank you for the comment. It's kinda meant to be a song, or when I wrote it that's what it was for.
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This is deep with a strong hollow feel and the vast empty moon in which you describe your life. It feels like there is a lot of space that can be fille but its so hollow... Don't know if that makes any sense thats just what i got but i have to say this a fantastic piece and it beautiful. Well done!
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