Stream of Consciousness Released
The flow of awareness, streams down the narrow waters of life.
Captivating a grand perception within the depth of my senses.
As the running of my tears liquify my mind.
My inner souls floats endless like in limbo.
Trying to understand the subconscious fears of death.
As numbness conquers my life, devouring all I lived for.
And yet my consciousness interprets voracious feeling
Too consume the life at hand, with triumph or valor.
Guiding me to that victory of my last breath.
Unveiling the stream of consciousness to me.
Making me aware that life and death can’t prevail together.
Stream of Consciousness Released
Author notes
Prompt; Stream of Consciousness
A contest entry
- Stream Of Consciousness Quickie Contest- 10 Entries/ 10 Minutes. by Mercury Rising.
600 points, ended July 26, 2007, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This was very wonderful kinda sad but also very insightful! I love it !
You never cease to amaze me sis!
Your my hero!
Love ,
sis,
~Lisa~
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very spiritual to me at least this is how i embraced it i thought it was very deep and it was such a special read it creeped through me in away never before i felt ut desereved gold i am going to give it golod with my applauds. this was lovely ~ julia ~
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Oh sweet little sister, You are wonderful, It ok I didn't win the Gold Just your grand applaude make me feel wonderful, and the great comments, Thank you sis for your support
LISA I love you too
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Beautiful, Lisa!
You awoke my stream of awareness, as well, I love poetry that makes one think.
Life and death are both parts of living, but we can only have one at a time, as you pointed out.
Thank you for releasing my stream of consiousness. I will give you three bunnies, and if I could, the gold trophy, the pot of gold at the end of the rainbow, eternal happiness, and ME! baby!
You are soooooo talented, I love reading your stuff.
I love you,
Brazos
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Thanks Sweetness, Just the truth here Life and death can't prevail together. It one or the other. Love you comment, love that it made you think, It means I am writing something worth reading. Thank you for the Bunnies. They give me a sense of accomplishment. (LISA)
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Wow....
I think u deserved Gold or Silver...this is very nice Lisa. I really liked this part...And yet my consciousness interprets voracious feeling
Too consume the life at hand, with triumph or valor.
Guiding me to that victory of my last breath.
Unveiling the stream of consciousness to me.
ur sis,
Ephiphany
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Wow sis your so supportive
At first I couldn't think of anything then this is what came to me. I have to admit it came out ok. Thank you for you outstanding comment for only you thought it deserve a silver or gold. (LISA)
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this was a wonderful write full of imagery that flowed throughout the write. i loved the way this all flowed together. a wonderful write. well done
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Thank my dear for your grand review greatly appreciated. Glad you liked it, (LISA)
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A really wonderful verbal waterfall that you have spilled across the page. Best of luck in my contest, and thanks for releasing this little torrent of words.
David
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Thank you my friend for a grand contest, I loved the prompt. At first I had a mind freeze but it turned out ok. Thank you for you outstanding comments and review, and for the HM (LISA)
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