I told you I wouldn't hurt you
I'm truly sorry that I did
And love is always worth it
Even if it tears you up inside
I didn't do anything to help
Shake notions from your head
All I did was show you
That you'ld always have a friend
Love is unconditional
and in the end is right
My feelings haven't changed for you
But I can't wait my whole life.
I'm Sorry for the pain I've caused
And you are still in my heart
I can't forget the way I've felt
And honestly never will
And you say I've killed you
Starting on the inside
And all I can do is lament for hurting you so
But the game you said I played
Eats me up inside
For all I did was love you
Yet you still can't realize
That the only things I told you
Were truth be known
And I'm really sorry if I've made it feel different
And in the end it is
I'll always be your friend
If you don't shun me out of your life.
A contest entry
- "Your Favorite Prewrite" by Virgoan.
500 points, ended September 3, 2007, 103 entries
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The present tone in this is really great. Like the contemporary approach done.
Thanks so much for participating in my contest. I wish you all the best. I encourage you to keep on writing my friend.
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Very Well Written
It's a very well written poem that is thoughtful and truthful. It's hard but to deal with the grief of losing someone we love and that too hurts even more when misunderstood by the other who is determined to let us know we hurt them instead... you have captured the hurt and pain in your words that flow like gushing waterfall waiting to merge into the flowing river... from your poetry it seems there is misunderstanding that is determined to stand in between...it's hard but not impossible to forgive and be friends but the other person is willing to listen... just like love, true friendship is unconditional and will stand by no matter what comes... the operative word is willingness of the other... welll either way good luck and hope you get what your heart desires.... take care and thanks for letting strangers' eyes peek into your thoughts...Minoo
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She will never be friend with you. Unconditional love advocates a true love relationship which is active at all levels. Friendship is only a room and is not unconditional. The energies are different. It does not work your way. The poem itself is very well written. Nobody has the power to change another person to their will or suit their own fancies. There is an inalienable right to human dignity There is no hope in this case as friends. As i read it from your poem. Now you can deal with hurt and grief. For what it was worth My take.
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I can see your emotion..good write. Keep on writing
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Wow...
This is a great write and a good read...my poems are along the same line as yours are right now...although mine are less well written. Great write and keep up the good work drop in and read my stuff if you got the time. Thanks for the good read my friend. I hope she forgives you, I am going through the exact same thing myself right now...like i said...drop by if u got a chance.
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Ahhhmazing!
Wow.
This is ahhhmazing. I can really relate to this. ALOT.
"My feelings haven't changed for you
But I can't wait my whole life."
^^^
Them lines right there are soooo true. This is an ahhmazing write, and I have to applaud it FORRR SURRRE. I'll also have to check out some of your other poems,because if they're as good as this, I can't not read them!
Great job with this=]
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