Just like the ocean's waves meet land's shores
I rise up when we're near
I lap at your body so dear
When I'm in a tumultuous state off shore
I roar toward you to take you
I lay you down and slake you
When I'm calmly ebbing with the moon's pull
I flow over you and take your form
I enjoy that touch of excitement born
And as I flow with outward currents so strong
I let you keep my wetness there
I let it seep into your body fair
My waves of passion will never cease to seek you
I roll upon you night and day
I stay with you for that's the way
Where we come together, those few dramatic places
I slide easily into your caves
I froth and you tell me to behave
The skies fill with my liquid and billow around
I rain down on you to wet your face
I release to you with a torrent's pace
I am a longing sea, and you are my firm land
I will lie next to you forever
Throughout time we'll be together
Author notes
never separated
A contest entry
- Love On My Mind. by Poetryintheblood.
375 points, ended July 29, 2007, 4 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Golden Poems (pre-write quickie) by JM Kenyon.
450 points, ended December 22, 2007, 41 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give Me Your Best Prewrite Quickie by Heavenly Angel.
450 points, ended January 18, 2008, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything Goes by karmacae.
700 points, ended February 14, 2008, 67 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Totally gorgeous!
Your use of metaphor is amazing!
A fine sharing in this contest
Thank you so much for being a part of it; all the best! -
I love the extended metaphor of this, you did a great job with the comparisons and contrasts in this write. Very smooth, sensual reading.
s and best wishes always... ~Genie~
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nice
love your play with imagery
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Thank you for your beautiful entry, Josephine
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Beautiful metaphors and fantastic imagery. A sensual delight to read. Best of luck in the contest.
Bravo
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"I roar toward you to take you"
Gorgeous.
I love the images for a metaphor against the worldly view of natural linguistics at stance.
Come together. and hold the hand to mind
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