Their love so forbidden
They have to be hidden
Their hearts a crimson red
As her heart bled
And he held her close
And wispered, My love for you still grows
They sat and gazed out at the night
He leaned in to his dark love, with a gentle bite
The blood dripped down her pale neck
Their love was like a ship wreck
Mysterious, hidden, and dangerous
His eye gleamed lercherous
In the dim room
She knew her life was a gloom
But with him, she felt wanted
He wasn't vaunted
Like all the humans she knew
He lifted her high above the blue
His dead lips brushed hers
Her emotions of love lust stirs
And the two emotions collide
He, her savor, she his vampire bride
Author notes
Kassy is a Freak
Okay, This is a remake of one of my old poems...hope you enjoy ^-^
A contest entry
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Please tell me what you think
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this was good....it seemed a bit cliche...though I liked it....the rhythm was a bit off here and there..but overall....6/10....good luck
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really good
I like this poem really well written -
Nice and twisted. It was so beautiful and the rhyme was really good. Nice job. Good luck in the contest.
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This is a sweet and simple poem of vampyre love.
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I love the Vampiric Romance you have here. A nice concept. Not something I was expecting for the contest but nonetheless a good write.
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I like this a lot. Vampires are very sexy and mysterious and I reading people's perspective on them.
"His dead lips brushed hers
Her emotions of love lust stirs"
Full of power and meaning. It was very well written and I like the rhyming.
Very nice and good luck in the contest!
[and congrats on your previous silver!!]
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wow i was going to say i was able to know what you were saying but then as i read i had to really think. very good. i like it. and just what i was looking for.
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heh, its pretty good =) i love vampires and this is pretty good way of telling one of there stories =)
Good onya
And goodluck !!!!
SeeJ
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It was good, I am into vampires at the moment and this one reached my heart, as once happened. Thank you and best of luck!
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Great
I normally don't enjoy readings like this, but this one caught my attention and it brought me in. I like this one alot and I can't wait to read more of your material
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