I’m named most holy, your mother
In the garden of Three Trees
I have been dining, none other
At the table of Three Queens
I’ve raised green glasses, to heavens
In hopes again of sun light
I word the stories, unto them
To the sisters three this night
A toast to
Wisdom
O’ Dear, the eldest where it is in heaven you sleep
Rebirth, of the silver waters here for sisters weep
O’ Crone, this angel is of the one wisdoms do reap
Purple, of the flowers a-draped o’re your grave so deep
Angel, my dearest your words of true violet have cast
Ages, of young tender comers of many cent’ry past
Done of, many sages hath you been one flower chaste
On Pure, of the ol’ crone’s singing as of night this last
A toast to
Power
O’ Dear, the middle child born of heaven you fight
By death, of the angry fires here for sisters’ right
Mother, this angel is of the one powers do might
Scarlet, of the roses a-crowned ‘round your head so bright
Vixen, my dearest your heart of true passion’s red song
Vict’ry, swords a-flame demons of many battle won
Come to, many magicks hath you been one flower wronged
Patience, of the mother’s power as of night this bond
A toast to
Courage
O’ Dear, the young one where it is heaven you thus breathe
For birth, of the moon-lit shadows here on sisters’ knees
Maiden, this angel is of the one courage do bring
And Green, of the forest adorned from your music clean
Precious, my dearest of loves for green magick's true dawn
Goddess, Her nature’s begging of many winters long
A wish, many angels hath you been a flower strong
At last, of the maiden’s courage will dawn come anon
I’m named most holy, your mother
In the garden of Three Trees
I have been dining, none other
At the table of Three Queens
I’ve raised green glasses, to heavens
In hopes again of sun light
I word the stories, unto them
To the sisters three this night
Author notes
Ohhhhhhhhkay...this one needs some 'xplaing!
All this is poem is talking about is a trinity...
The Celts believed everything went in circles...
Birth
Death
Rebirth
Maiden
Mother
Crone
The crone is the oldest and the wise one...her colour is purple and she is waiting for rebirth
the mother is the middle one and the powerful one...her colour is red and she is death.
the maiden is the young one and the couragous one...her colour is green and she brings life and all that good stuff...
I illustrated on the idea with the Trinity being in the form of trees...c'mon...trees are cool...I love trees...go hug one...they have less issues then people.
The crone in this poem is buried and her sisters cry but she will be reborn. (here for sisters weep.)
The mother in this poem brings death to those that threaten the treasures of being and she protects her sisters (her for sisters' right)
And the maiden brings gives birth to a forest and the dawn with love and magick and she reminds her sisters of innocence (moon-lit shadows on sisters' knees)
This poem may be based on this trinity but it is certainly left to the reader's interpratation...I hope I spelled that right...
In a list
A contest entry
- For Poets With 10 Trophies Or Less. Prewrites allowed by tawk.
550 points, ended August 2, 2007, 43 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Meaning of Life by Mezclita.
1000 points, ended August 12, 2007, 14 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Rhyme Time by Danna Hobart.
375 points, ended October 12, 2007, 32 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Turn that silver into gold pt 5 by whispernthedark.
300 points, ended March 6, 2008, 31 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Great poem, thank you for entering the contest. Good luck.
♥
whisper
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Thank you for reading. Have a great day.
Síochán leat
~Mairéad~
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Very good indeed
I enjoyed this read very much and the explanation at the bottom was helpful to so I went back and read again .
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Thank you very much. ^_^
I'm glad you enjoyed.
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Because I got so many entries, I am going to judge this a little different than I normally do. On the contest page the challenge was to write a rhyming poem that shows instead of tells, with imagery and metaphor galore. In addition to those things, I am going to take the meter and rhythm into account along with originality. So I am going to award points for each of those things and then sort of tally them at the end to decide on the winners.
Show vs. Tell: 70/100
Concrete Imagery: 80/100
Metaphor/Symbol/Allusion: 90/100
Originality: 90/100
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Thus the comments before me..I hammer the here ye, very lovely piece,can't say much more than well done! thanks for sharing...MM
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Thank you very much for the awesome comment.
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This is really awesome!
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Thank you. ^_^
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Wow this is a very nice piece even though it is long it held me from the begining to the end. Thank you for sharing this and congratulations on your trophys very well earned
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Thank you very much for the awesome comment!
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Fantastic Imagery!!!
Simply amazing..I adore this write..
I love the author notes and was so pleased to see that I was not far off in what I had gathered as your inspiration for this write..
I can not tell you how beautiful this flows..I do not believe there to be a word for such divine beauty..
You are a gifted poet..
Peace
and love
~A~
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Oh wow...I love this comment...definately a favourite for the day! Thanks for the awesome-ness of it!
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Very interesting and thought provoking. Thank you for your notes explaining the poem. The language you have used to pen this is fantastic. You have an amazing talent. I loved it and congratulations on the trophies.
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Thank you very much for the awesome comments...
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Pretty class
I'm pretty young so maybe I haven't got an expert opinion, but that's a very complicated but beautiful poem, congratulations
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Thanks for the awesome commnet
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Wow, you have written a very thought provoking write here, something to tantalise the senses of every reader.... I love the language, the word choice and really the whole thing is well worth it's spot on the front page of this site... awesome job on this one
Karen
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Thank You Karen
Thank you very much for the awesome comment
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This is an amazing write! It was so clear that the explanation in the author's note was hardly needed and so good that in the end although you rerun those same two stanzas over, it didn't quite feel the same (basically u managed to move me). There's surely a little bit of each tree inside every one of us. Wonderful words + very well thought through~ thank u 4 sharing^^
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Thank you so much for your wonderful comment!
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This is a great poem, but I just have to say that the guy that commented on your poem, the third one below this, is a frightening lunatic. There's a hospital missing a patient.
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This is amazing!! Such a wonderful write so full of brilliant imagery and emotion!! Good luck in the contest and thanks for entering
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Thank you very much! ^_^
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This gives me goose bumps my little one...It brought tears to my eyes and a softness to my heart...You are a true poet in all ways that matters
Thank you so much for sharing
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Oh my...what an amazing comment! Thank you so much!
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This took away my breath, I was sitting here longing to be inspired or have my breath taken away and you did the latter. I had my hippie brethren read this poem and we agree...this is amazing, freakin' awesome job chica...chill it. Peace n' love, JT n' Crew
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Why thank you very much! Yourself and your hippie brethren! I happen to be a proud tree hugger...Wiccan to be exact...but I have a good friend by the name of Matt...a hippie proud...that I constantly share little secrets about herbs with...because they DO have so many little sercrets.
Thank you very much for reading and commenting.
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Brilliant write
True poetry has it place in heaven & you my friend are a true poet. Just a simply beautiful write that captivated me. What more can I say
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I lovedddd this. beautiful, beautiful.
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Many Thank yous!
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