Palm spreads
margarine
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With whipping escapes
of passion -
I fell
and swallowed you whole.
Author notes
falling in love can hurt... but once you fall... it is too late to turn around! Thanks for the inspiration!
A contest entry
- Celticmoon's and Leander's glue a trophy on my Prewrite by leander.
800 points, ended March 27, 2008, 74 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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I had a little giggle with your author notes and to quote you: 'falling in love can hurt' and then use a little reference in your poem: 'and I swallowed you whole' -> I could definately understand and imagine vividly how that would hurt :p:d :))
lol *giggle*
Anyway, serious now. I like this short little piece you have written. Interesting format, although I would adjust the word 'melting' a little bit so that it goes down gradually.(I hope this will work-
m
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or something the like)
anyway, thank you for this entry as well :d
Leander
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lol... thank you so much lee for your suggestion. I will take it to heart
Mel
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What a fascination image this is up there and your poem is equally unique. Very strong and the closing is superb.
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Simply brilliant and in so few words but then from you I would expect no less. Your are a master at seduction and sensuality in few words.
Thank you for entering,
best of luck to you!
Blessings
Bel
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Well Weaved,
What an awesome entry, always good poetry reading you, and most of the time, just down right amazing!
Much love I send, and keep up the wonderful works! 
Peace~~~~
-Timothy aka poeticweaver~
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Great. I wondered if she was tying cherries together or if it was piercings...lot of things occured to me. This is beautiful.
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This was definately a fine piece of work. Best ofluck to you.
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beautiful!
You penned such a wonderful take on the prompt!
Lynda
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i just read your author comments, so true and you're welcome
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very interesting take on the prompt "the whipping escapes of passion, i love it i also love the way you formatted this . well done and good luck. please do not rate my comment or message me until after i judge the contest. be well and be blessed
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Nicely Done
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