For in my darkest hour,
I could not see the light
I may have lost the battle
I’d never give up the fight
I was full of determination
In my struggle to break free
Fighting against a demon
I could not hear nor see
I was stumbling along a path
Many obstacles were in my way
Trapped inside my mind
I could not see the light of day
Riding a tidal wave of emotions
I came crashing to the ground
Drowning in a sea of despair
I could not hear a sound
Then suddenly I hear a voice
An angel calling out to me
“Give me your hand,” she said
“I’m here to set you free”
This angel is really special
She is my beautiful wife
For in my darkest hour
She came and saved my life
July 24 2007
A contest entry
- Do you deserve this? by Never Fall in Love.
850 points, ended August 14, 2007, 60 entries
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Gold trophy winner
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Please tell me what you think
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Wow I really do love this poem. I dont know if I have commented on it before. But anyways. Long time no talk? So how ya been?
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This is so sweet, I especially loved the last stanza:
"This angel is really special
She is my beautiful wife
For in my darkest hour
She came and saved my life"
I loved that you had a happy ending.
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sorry it took so long to reply. thank you so much for reading my poem. I am happy to hear that you like it.
thanks kool
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This is really beautiful!
Such an endearing poem!
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Beautiful
Aww. I just love how you can write so fluently about your wife. She is lucky to have you and your lucky to have her. Since she indeed seems to be your inspiration. Thanks for this beautiful read. Keep it up. -
Beautiful
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GOSH!
This is cute. I loved it. It surprized me at the end.But this is amaxzing, you shold give your self brownie points.
This really hit me at the end when you wrote.
This angel is really special
She is my beautiful wife
That was sweet. I bet she loves you.
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That's so beautiful (beautiful is an overused word but it's the only word that I can think of at the moment) and I can really understand how you could be inspired to write a poem like this. Love it
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Thank you for your comments and for reading my poem.
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breath taking
I stand in awe!!! I can only hope to experience that absolute power of love and its ability to be able to conquere all some day. BEAUTIFUL BEAUTIFUL BEAUTIFUL
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Thank you for your comment. It means the world to me, to know that people are enjoying what I write. Thanks so much for reading this poem.
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wow! This is amazing! What a beautiful ending to what seemed like a struggle for life. This was incredible. I am glad I chose to read this
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Thank you for reading my poem. I'm glad that you like it.
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what a wonderful rhyme this holds and such a happyily-ever-after ending too... it's good to know there is happiness out there
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Thank you for reading my poem. Happiness is always out there sometimes it's just hard to see.
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Fantastic!
This is a beautiful poem. The metre, imagery and rhyme are excellent. I love the subject matter (I am inspired to write by my wonderful wife).
Just beautiful!
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Thank you so much for your comments. I look forward to reading about your wife in a poem some day soon. Thanks for reading
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Loves Embrace
Thank you for the comments. I have 2 pomes posted now, Independence Day and The Kiss (about my Sasha).
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Very cute!
I love the fact that this poem doesn't need much imagery. It does wonders with the rhyming and choice of words.
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Thoroughly enjoyed it.
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I'm glad that you enjoyed this poem. Thanks so very much for reading this
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Wow, this is a wonderful peice! Congrats on your gold trophy!
you did a wonderful job, you should have gotten gold on all the contests this was in! great work! keep it up!
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Thanks Crimson
I love writing poem about my wife for she is my light that guides me home when I am lost. Thanks for reading
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though i do not have a wife i can sure say i wish someone would walk into my life. you have done a wonderful job with this write and i am looking forward to readign more from you. viyanna rosemarie
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Thank you for your comments on my poem
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Aww, this is the sweetest poem ever. It's amazeing how certain people can come into your life and change everything. Keep up the great work.
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it is amazing how some people are sent to you when you need a helping hand. Thank you for reading.
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It was a good poem but what really captured my attetion was the title and the 1st verse.Good jo
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The title was given to this poem by my friend storiesuntold. Thanks for reading
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I love your angelic poem. And i love anything about angels Your poem is full of protection and love and support. They are wonderful in testing times. A nice tribute to your wife. Angels are enamored of the language that is spoken in heaven, which is their own on earth and may be or not understand. My husband keeps my wings thank God he is in charge Astoundingly refreshing.
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I('m so glad that you enjoyed this poem. This one holds a special place in my heart. Thanks for reading
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what an amazing poem for your wife.
if more men felt like this the world would be a better place.
thank you from all the good women
on this site.
you are a wonderful man to write such a tribute
to the women you love and treasure.
god bless u
candy
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How special to write something so sweet and loving for someone..even more special that you are spending the rest of your life with her. A wonderful caring piece.
Thank you for sharing.
Soulful Woman
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What a wonderful write about your wife - how truly lucky she is to have you writing poems like this about her. A golden winner too - congratulations. Easy to read and understand these sentiments you express so well in these lines - liked the rhythm and rhyme, flow in this poem.
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Thank you so much for reading my poem.
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she is lucky to have such a lovely poem for her
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Thank you very much for read my poem.
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lovely, great rhyme, but the flow was a bit disjointed, I think with editing it could be really beautiful.
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Hmmmmm
Content excellent, rhyming good, scansion wayward. I need a poem to flow in and out of my mind leaving the message without upsetting the music.
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I LOVE IT
This is such a wonderful write. I love the way it flows. I love the lines I was full of determination In my struggle to break free Fighting against a demon I could not hear nor see. I also love the fact you write about your wife. If she's your inspiration keep it up. I hope to find someone that I can write such wonderful poetry about. Great Job!!
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In time you will and wait and see what you pen will write from your heart. Thanks for reading
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love.
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oh so awesome
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Thank you so much for reading my poems. I'm really glad that you like it. I think it's awesome to.
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Excellent poem here...
Congrats on the gold!
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Thank you so much for reading my poems. I didn't expect to win the gold. I feel so happy that everyone like this poem.
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pretty cool man
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Totaly awesome
I know not many people use awesome anymore but in my time there wasnt a better word for it . What a lady and a wife to be there no matter what so if you need a definition of love just look into her eyes speaking without a sound and holding your soul to freedom -
I could so relate to this write. My husband to walks with me and my depression and demons from my past everyday. He never gives up on me. What a wonderful and heartfelt write. Good luck in the contest and thanks for entering
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Thank you for reading my poem. Sometime depression can get the best of a person, but it sure is nice to have someone there to help you throught it.
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I enjoyed this tribute to your wife, as all too often we forget the ones that really matter. To walk the path of depression is a lonely path, but the pain does ease and with support from a wife or husband makes the dark days lighter.
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She seems to know when I need her. She's always there for me no matter whats up. Thanks for reading
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Very well...
The theme you chose is pretty great, and there is some very cool imagery... but imho, it flows a little forced or frenetic.Good job overall.. Keep up the good work!
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Sorry it took so long to comment back. Thanks for read this poem.
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Awww...
This poem is so sweet.
I don't think that I've ever met one single person whom would write a poem about their wife.
This was beautiful.
I liked how you described your struggles and how you reffered to your wife as an angel.
Like a saviour.
This is truely a fairytale in the making. :]
Great work.
Keep writing!
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This surely is no fairy tale. I write lots of poems to my wife and for my wife. Thanks for reading
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Beautiful
Such a beautiful poem here and I think I would name it Loves Embrace
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Thank you for reading my poems. I like the title
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AWWW. There u go again- being so sweet. I loved this. It was a very good poem with such a good/sweet ending. I loved it. Good luck in the contest.
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Thanks Ale E. Theres just one problem with this poem. I can't seem to give it a name. Everything I write has a name and this has me stuck.
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