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Was I Just a Game?

Was every word you said to me
Calculated precicely
To get you what you wanted?
Was it all just a game?

When you would tease me,
When you would tickle me or poke me,
Did you do that just so you could touch me?
Was that more than a game?

I thought that you were kind and funny and good
Until you showed me what you really are.
Was that a part of your calculations?
Did you think that I would like that?

Now that we have gone our seperate ways
And I will never see you again,
You torment me,
Because you aren't what I thought you were.

I worry constantly about you,
Even after you hurt me so much.
I have done everything I can to save you,
Yet it is not enough.

You - you who put me through Hell,
I agonize over you every moment of every day-
What was I to you?
A face? A body?
A game?

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  • still.she.waits
    November 7, 2008

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    i think any girl, and even some guys can relate to this. and the simple emotional language and the fact that is relatable is what makes this poem good.

    -andi


  • Wilted Rose Bush
    April 5, 2008

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    Great.
    Emotional and powerful. Repetition was good and the stanza structure was also quite effective. I could relate to this really well and it was exactly what i wanted.

    well done, good luck and thanks for entering


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    April 5, 2008
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    It seems that way to me, or it was with my ex anyway that's how he acted and I couldn't believe he'd do this to me, because I gave him all the love I've ever mustered in my heart and he used that and hurt me and I don't think I could EVER forgive him for that. Sorry you know how it feels, betrayal is one of the worst feelings in the world, another is a broken heart.


  • Krick
    March 2, 2008

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    I feel like this was too clich'e,
    forgive me if my comments arn't up to your standards
    i just feel like you could do better


  • Luminescence
    February 27, 2008

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    oh wow... this really is a great poem...

    Its such a sad one too....

    thank you so much for entering myc contest and good luck,
    ~lumin


  • kiwi bird
    October 24, 2007

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    Hi grapefruit
    its kiwi
    Is this the poem about the guy you met in Washington DC
    I a sorry thata he caused you this much pain
    but... When your chewin on lifes grizzle don't grumble give whistle and this will help thing turn out for the best and... always look on the bright side of life (and so an and so forth)
    Go Monty Python
    Across the Universe was great and I think that we are getting you the sound track ( I never said that)
    Cya tomarrow


  • Girl With Guitar silver member
    August 4, 2007

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    Ok so I never award my contest entrants with the clappy dudes... but I have to in this case. Don't tell anyone

    Look, relating is easier than grade 3 maths and come on, you remember how easy that was. I know you've probably been told this so many times but people like this overtake your mind and they become your friends before they start using you. I should know, I'm the posterchild of being used.

    The thing is... I feel sorry for all the perverts who hurt me because I betrayed their trust by reporting them or I made them upset at times... but just recently I learnt that we should feel sorry for them because they're ILL. It's hard to get your head around, but it's worth it. They need to be reported so they can get help.

    Take care ok, Ravenblood will most likely have my head but I'm adding another poem to the finalists. This one.

    Bandaid.


  • CinematicInk
    August 2, 2007
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    magnificent!


  • PerfectImperfection
    July 29, 2007
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    This is very deep, a personal write that dwells on feeling rather than the paint of words. In that, I mean that the reader may never know what 'game' you are speaking of, though we might have an idea. Lots of emotion, without description. Thank you for entering, best of luck in the contest.


  • ObituaryBirthday
    July 29, 2007

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    brilliant..

    i love this poem coz i am kinda involved in a similliar situation at the moment..so..i really like it..

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