not recognizable
an expression with the
atmosphere about my eyes
like those who
survive trauma
i lay upon a bed of leaves
watching emeralds
in the first light
coconuts in testicular arrangements
cooing lovers
beaks engaged in breasts
~i take pleasure in this pain~
i walk the beach
in search of truths
think of death
miracles and solitude
my head stays bowed
listening to the slow
scrape of footprints
extinguished cigarettes
clog this drain
crushed skulls
like quarterbacks
deflated groans
while doors bang shut
behind
suck one last drag
let the brittle silence settle
feathers about me now
like colorful remnants of a pillow fight
among concubines in heaven
In a list
A contest entry
- PitBull on a HatBox by NurseChilly.
1800 points, ended August 1, 2007, 11 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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There are great lines here. The beauty of overcoming suffering... Lots of emotion and complexity... love it.
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this is quite incredible... the
emotions brought about by the imagery... the intensity and the simplicity all combined so masterfully... the seemingly serene scene with so much going on beneath and only hinted at... the reflective tone of the narrative inspiring introspection in the reader... an absolutely compelling write... and a very worth while read!
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Thank you
I am so glad that another poet is like me and returns reads! lol...
Thank you for your thoughtful reply, it means a lot to me.
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my head stays bowed
listening to the slow
scrape of footprints
especially nice stanza- thanks for entering
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oohh yes... I take pleasure in this pain... you got me there girl.. yes you did
hooked me in and reeled this like some big fish on a solid line...
strong piece this
G.x
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bravo
Very interesting and some highly unusual images here...deftly done througout... bravo... bravo ...bravo...
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The details in this are excellent. Good luck in the contest!
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Your choice of words are awesome, Your imagery was terrific and the flow is great. thanks for the read and keep on writing
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cool
i like the way you use imagery and metophors in your writting
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