I
See you
Only I
See transparent
Neutral images
Of a colored culture
Painted with mental brushed
Strokes of monochrome prejudgments
Of we that represents a union
Of cultural taboos labeled sinful
From Clandestine eyes from the populace
Judging we from the mythical scriptures
Never knowing your light awakens
My darkness that visualizes
Love within the two of us
Transcending mosaic
Restrictions that are
A part of you
That loves me
And I
You
Author notes
Since I'n not normal I had to change the scheme of things and write in a different form (makes it interesting) I have a prewrite called "Sorbet" that would have made the screen sticky (no prewrites but if it was!!!)
I decided on a Ethree poem:
The poetry form, Etheree, consists of 10 lines of 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 10 syllables. Etheree can
also be reversed and written 10, 9, 8, 7, 6, 5, 4, 3, 2, 1. Get creative and write an Etheree with
more than one verse, but follow suit with an inverted syllable count.
Reversed Etheree: 10, 9, 8, 7, 6, 5, 4, 3, 2, 1
Double Etheree: 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 10, 10, 9, 8, 7, 5, 4, 3, 2, 1
In a list
A contest entry
- Black and White LOVE by patsoldcat.
600 points, ended August 5, 2007, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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thanks for teaching me what an ethree is. i have no plans to use it for i have enought trouble wit ab ab cd ab, old and senile,
but this was bold and a strong write. i did see lots of divers thinking in it and the pic is nice not that i judge by pics, it was just nice.
did a great job here.
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Love should be equal
Being colour blind is what the world should be, it would be a far better place to be.
Loved this mikeeeee
Hugs onesugar
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Dynamic Write
Excellent form, perfect syllable count...has a strong message and lovely opinion about love, reguardless of color. I myself was raised colorblind...Loved this one...novy
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Thank U - I had to take a new perspective after I read a few of the other pieces. The form took away a little of my expression but it made me think harder ~ thx ah=gain ~ mikeeeeeee
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A creative presentation of your creativity,particularly liked the last nine lines,good luck in the contest
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Thank U - something away from the norm. I had to try it ~hugs and waves ((~~~~))MyKey
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thank you
blessings and luck -
Beautiful
This poem is beautiful through and through, being color blind is what the whole world should be, loving each other as equals, excellent write, thank for sharing and keep them coming.
raingoddess
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