We meet in this abandoned house,
for our love is not allowed.
I walk slowly up to you,
you meet me in the middle,
we meet in a crushing kiss,
you tenderly grab my breast,
and deepen the kiss,
I reach down and take hold of your shirt,
and pull it over your head,
you cannot wait.
You strip down naked before me,
then help me with my own clothes,
you lay me softly upon the blanket,
which you had prepared just for this,
You softly move your hands,
down my body,
you put your head between my legs,
drinking from my sweet necter.
I moan slowly as you deepen,
the kiss on my privates.
you raise back up,
and look me in the eyes,
then you slide within me,
as I yell out in delight,
we move like poetry in motion,
taking each other to the very top of passion.
We both cry out in orgasm,
we smile at each other,
knowing we have to leave again,
you kiss me passionately,
then we walk away,
but secretly knowing,
the passion within us.
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A contest entry
- Come on Baby Light My Fire! by OnyxtheForsaken.
700 points, ended August 8, 2007, 15 entries
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this was good.. but i wanted a lil more.. it showed the forbbiden love and all but it was not as descritive as i liked.. thanx for joining
laters
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To me this was just a tad on the mild side. If you were to give it more depth to the passion, it would make me feel something more than just plain and not excited.
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i won't say it. forbidden love... nice way to put my heart in your words lol.
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Wow. Very good. This poem was very romantic and sexy. It's hard to write on a subject like this and not make it sound perverted. But you accomplished writing a beautiful poem about love. Great job!
Megan -
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thank you, i was trying not to overdo it.
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Very nice...loved the old abandoned meeting place. Adds to the romance and anticipation! Best of luck in contest!
Blessings,
Azlyn
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good write! I feel it could have been a little more expressive though, like it seemed rushed when the feeling i got from it was something slow and sensual. However, it was still a sexy write and it had a good flow to it and some good imagery. Good luck!
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This is a very excellent write, your words flowed nicely, and you had me captured through the whole peice, godd job Hermana Cita!
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