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Morning Bouquet

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Morning Bouquet

Palace walls caressed by a beam of light,
touching my face as it beckons my eyes.
I have slumbered in silk throughout the night
and now, thoughts of my love beg me to rise.
I’m wearing a smile, as one may surmise.
Looking my best in a stunning array
of long flowing silk as blue as the skies.
I must look my best for my love today.

Finding my love in the trellised array,
amidst the roses and the palace walls.
My love gave to me, a gorgeous bouquet.
A garden of love, with trickling falls.
She gives me peace with all she can render,

my love is the garden; in roy'l splendor.

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Spenserian sonnet


The Spenserian sonnet, invented by Edmund Spenser has the rhyme pattern of:
a b a b b c b c c d c d e e
Here, the "abab" pattern sets up distinct four-line groups, each of which develops a specific idea; however, the overlapping a, b, c, and d rhymes form the first 12 lines into a single unit with a separated final couplet. The three quatrains then develop three distinct but closely related ideas, with a different idea (or commentary) in the couplet.

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  • Ellis gold member
    December 28, 2007
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    This is magical, wonderful -- OUTSTANDING

    Excellent Writing as always
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  • micol
    December 17, 2007

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    Beautiful, elegant, and well befitting Spenser's form--a rich opulence that is almost Elizabethan in texture. And form fits content beautifully.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    December 17, 2007

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    It is very easy for poems of form to concentrate on the form and lose some of the passion and warmth, this has not happened here, perfectly rhymed and formed as always and a really lovely read. Both Sue and I placed this in silver and a close run thing for gold.

    Please keep entering the other rounds, love is already underway.

    Thanks for your entry we both enjoyed reading it
    Jeff and Sue


  • wishintreeUK
    August 9, 2007

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    Well done and congratulations on Silver, a beautiful piece of work.

    ~Katie~


  • passim silver member
    August 8, 2007

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    This is a lovely Spenserian sonnet and I especially liked the couplet. Well done and thank you for entering.


  • Wind Walker
    August 4, 2007

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    Spencer is ok - your wonderous

    your pattern is good your elequence is magnificiant
    I know the works- you take it to new hights and do it so beautifully
    Good Luck in the contest
    B D


    • Amera gold member
      August 4, 2007
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      That's really a nice comment, thank you and thank you for the bunnies too.

      Love,
      Amera ♥

  • rubixcube1
    July 28, 2007
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    very nice and very well written


  • Luna Tique Fringe
    July 27, 2007

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    With such beauty and grace this has been penned, my friend. A magickal conjuration of nature's sweet imagery...sublime.


  • Katyv
    July 27, 2007
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    Very beautiful picture and very beautiful well written poem this is.


  • soulfultia gold member
    July 26, 2007

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    Just makes me want to *sigh*... Beautifully penned, what an incredible rhythm you have flowing through this...just Beautiful ~tia


  • blueyez
    July 26, 2007

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    This is soooooo beautifully romantic! But it was penned by one of the best


  • ellipsist
    July 25, 2007
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    sexy... very beautiful...

    it is gentle and subtly erotic... a lovely job with this piece!


  • PerVirtuous
    July 25, 2007

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    I see you cleaned it up! This is virtually perfect. I am impressed that you could improve it. Great edit! Keep it up.

    • Amera gold member
      July 25, 2007
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      Thanks Allan, like I told you it has to be perfect, it's going to be published.


  • HaleyMary
    July 25, 2007
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    Beautiful write. Wonderful flow. Good luck in the contest.


  • RedAquarius
    July 25, 2007

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    "I have slumbered in silk throughout the night" - I just love this line, it's so simple yet so rich in texture and feeling. Brava, m'friend!


  • sunny day
    July 25, 2007

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    BRAVO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    I just read a Shakespearean one that someone else did and now I'm treated to a Spenserean sonnet at the hands of another amazing poet. This is absolutely beautiful, so filled with love and thoughts of nature as well with the aromatic gardens. You are a form queen as mentioned before me and I am left breathless again after reading your wonderful work. Thank you so much for sharing this masterpiece with all of us and best wishes in the contest. I stand and bow as I applaud you for this one. Love and God bless you my friend, Joyce


  • Desire gold member
    July 25, 2007

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    Gorgeous!

    This is one Gorgeous Sonnet Form Queen
    and I must say~
    Powerful storyline with message that stains the
    Heart~
    Love the way You take the reader and how it flows
    from one line to the next!
    Dances across the pages~~
    Thank You for sharing Your Talent!!


    Magnificent!
    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • PerVirtuous
    July 25, 2007
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    Another stunning sonnet! You are becoming a master of them.

    I found my love in the trellised array
    amidst the roses and the palace walls.
    My love gave to me a gorgeous bouquet
    the garden of love, with trickling falls.
    My love is the garden in all her splendor,
    She gives me peace with all she can render.

    It is just beautiful, like you. Yourending is brilliant and artful. Many kudos. Three bunnies.


    • Amera gold member
      July 25, 2007

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      Thanks so much, it’s your beautiful reinforcing comments that push me to write better. You have no idea how much they help me.


  • Hetha gold member
    July 25, 2007

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    This is gorgeous, and I love the picture, that accompanies it! The words paint a soothing, and picturesque scene, that promises so much more! Excellent job! Your deliverance is perfect! Good luck in the contest!
    ~Hetha


    • Amera gold member
      July 25, 2007
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      Hetha

      Your comments mean so much to me. For a writer as talented as yourself to even read my work is so humbling. Thank you so much.


  • capricornpoet
    July 25, 2007

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    i love this

    I WILL Have to try this form...it walks like a dream, words of gentle streams ..just inspires love ..
    gentleness ...

    • Amera gold member
      July 25, 2007
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      capricornpoet

      You are rapidly becomming one of my best friends.


  • Candy6
    July 25, 2007
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    Very beautiful

    Very beautiful picture of a girl. Well written.

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