I am silent space hosting all elements
subtle substratum of vibration and sound
omnipresent expansiveness without boundaries
invisible magician of mystic transformation
I know not of earth’s solid structure of foundation
nor am I burdened by its defensive walls of rigidity
for I am weightless touch of butterfly’s wing
lighthearted freedom of unlimited formlessness
I feel not fire’s fervent flames of passion
nor am I shattered by its volcanic explosions of anger
for I am soothing coolness of ocean’s breeze
sangfroid essence of eternal emptiness
I move not with water’s whimsical waves of devotion
nor do I drown in its stagnant pools of nostalgia
for I am innocent smile on baby’s lips
detached presence of solemn serenity
I soar not in air’s creative currents of inspiration
nor do I fear its impulsive tornados of rebellion
for I am soundless whisper of angel’s voice
immobile center of blissful oneness
Meet me in the core of your undisturbed mind
I am the space between two thoughts
the stillness between two breaths
my expression is silence - my nature peace
Follow me to the primordial source of manifestation
comforting cradle of your sighing soul
for I am akasha residing in Purusha
your own subtle spirit dwelling in Oneness
Author notes
watch the video : http://s247.photobucket.com/albums/gg123/poetmaa/?action=view¤t=akashicconfessions.flv
my constantly updated video-poetry :
http://allpoetry.com/poem/show/3791503
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for my spiritual brother sandip saha with love
http://allpoetry.com/Sandip%20Saha
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* sangfroid … detached (literally : coldblooded)
** akasha … sanskrit for ether
*** purusha … sanskrit for the essential being, the higher self
The fifth element, the quintessence, is called ETHER, and is the subtlest of all elements. Ether is the empty space filled by all objects. It is contained within earth, water, fire and air as their capacity to take form and their potentiality of growth …
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A contest entry
- Poets Survivor -Top 4 -Round 13 by Ryno.
400 points, ended July 31, 2007, 4 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Poets Survivor -FINAL THREE -Round 14 (Semi-Finals; Doorway #1) by Ryno.
300 points, ended August 18, 2007, 3 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - FOR ALL MY FAVS BECAUSE I AM A PAIN IN THE SOFT SPOT LOL by Swan song.
2400 points, ended July 5, 24 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I really enjoyed reading this poem then watching you read it. You are one talented young lady and I must say it is nice to watch a person read with such a lovely smile on their face. That is something I would love to see more of. Thank you for this entry
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I watched the video and then came here to read these beautiful thoughts...There is so much to love in every line and I am awed of those lines which catch the essence of 'being' especially the unmeasurable space between two thoughts and the stillness between two breaths..those fleeting things that you have captured with your words.
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Yep! this is what I wanted
in round three. It's too bad it's a prewrite. It is a free verse masterpiece. What can I say to get you back in? I have to respect your choice, just don't have to like it. Thanks Marion, for the beautiful share.
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I love the idea of sharing without competing ...
I thank you for having guided me onto this bright path through your kind and open heart ...
maa
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I am in complete awe of your poem. Esp when you read it. Cute bird to I have to come back here You are a very lovely poet.
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Precious Marion.
I read your poem and watched the video. You truly are serene in calmness, a stream of gentle touch in spirit. Your face looks familiar ... it carries traces of my own beloved grandmother and mother. Inside deepset love, I recognize you.
Thank you for sharing your essence. It is a gift divine.
Love
Myra
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perfection~
You have found such a wonderful beautiful poem about peace....
It calms the heart the soul and mind...Heck that sounds like a phrase Oprah would use and she does...
The imagery in this is sheer perfection sweet sis...
Congrats on the silver trophy as well
It was well deserved...will catch up on your poems...
I have been in the hospital with bronchitis and left so weak....
Love you sweet sis..
I just posted a new one just now not many reads...
Would love for you to drop by and give it a look see
Did love this immensley
Hugs n love
Susan~~~
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this catches as much as one can the space of sublime freedom that exists when one is nolonger unawakened, no longer caught in the lies of the ego. Beautifully expressed, even if as Buddhist say "The finger pointing at the moon is not the moon," this poem in its own right sings a lullabye and a smile that gives grace to soul.
Love, Tom B.
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Excellent Piece
The poem captures so well the thoughts I do greatly appreciate. It is of immense pleasure, my sister, that you wrote this for me. Its a great honour. Thank you very much. The wording is excellent. The idea of monism has been brought out with delicate poetic touch. Congratulations for such a wonderful write. God bless you! -
so true. I can only say this is beautiful.
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You are NOTHING is what you are!
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yes ...
emptiness dancing ...
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Maa,
This is beautiful. Your words flow like magic and give such peace. What a lovely voice for the inner soul.
Amazing!
Love
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I know not of earth’s solid structure of foundation
nor am I burdened by its defensive walls of rigidity
for I am weightless touch of butterfly’s wing
I feel not fire’s fervent flames of passion
nor am I shattered by its volcanic explosions of anger
for I am soothing coolness of ocean’s breeze
sangfroid essence of eternal emptiness
Meet me in the core of your undisturbed mind
I am the space between two thoughts
the stillness between two breaths
my expression is silence - my nature peace
Follow me to the primordial source of manifestation
comforting cradle of your sighing soul
for I am akasha residing in Purusha
your own subtle spirit dwelling in Oneness
Dear Poet,
I feel the cool touch of Krishna's flute falling
through the cracks of cacophony, the melifluous
breeze of eternal stillness, melting the chains
of bondage.
This is exactly what I AM looking for in this contest.
Thank you for entering IS THERE A GOD & WHAT IS IT
contest.
Thank you for supplying definitions, although, I am
familiar with sanskrit terms, at least the most
heard ones and sangfroid as calmness of mind.
You have followed the rules perfectly, inspired
the reader, and pleased the soul within the
silent breath.
The only critique if I were to offer one is that
of "the earth's solid structure of foundation"
it fit with the following line yet somehow it
broke the free-flowing ease as I had need to stop
and look at that more than twice.
Haribol,
lovepeacelight,
liquid
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Powerful
Such a way with expressing such peace that flows within the breeze of poetry.. The sea within the dolphin, the music inside a lover's hearstrings that strum eternally.. I just adored this, and it calms the spirit beautifully.
Thanks for sharing,
Much love, Timothy aka poeticweaver~
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I love how you give the inner spirit its own voice and these lines whisper with infinite grace offering the joyful knowledge that each of us has access to this wonderful state of being if only we would take
the time to meet at the core. Blue
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This was an excellent choice, a wonderful entry. Hugs, Bunny
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I would be hard pressed to pick a favorite or "best" piece from the many you've written in the course of this contest, but think this was an excellent choice. Although I loved all the poems from the last round, this was my personal favorite and I was not at all surprised by how close your and Laura's scores were. Congrats on the silver...it was very well deserved. Thank you also for your huge support during the many rounds of this contest...it's meant more to me than I can even say.
Love ands
~J.
P.S. Good luck!
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Wonderful choice Maa
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The wording in this has very bold and powerful in a way, you gave a smart, wise voice to something so...beautiful. Stunning poem.
I am the space between two thoughts
the stillness between two breaths
I thought the phrasing here was awesome. Your strong point was defiantly your imagery, though I felt the emotion and metaphor could've been stronger.
Wonderful ending also. Good job -
Wow, I thought this was phenomenal. In my opinion, your best of the contest! The way you spoke of all the things that akasha is NOT was so perfect. To try to describe what it IS alone would not have fulfilled your purpose. Also to use the inverted phrases like "I move not," "I feel not," gave such a timeless feel to your piece.
You have some incredible images here. I thought it was so clever to incorporate fire, water, and air into your piece and to contrast/compare akasha to them. My favorite description of it was:
Meet me in the core of your undisturbed mind
I am the space between two thoughts
the stillness between two breaths
my expression is silence - my nature peace
I was just so totally impressed with this piece. It rose to an ethereal beauty that is really quite breathtaking.
Wonderful approach to the assignment!!!
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As usual Marion a breathtaking write. The metaphors are wonderful and the flow is captivating. I loved the depth of wisdom displayed in this piece and your verbiage was outstanding. Excellent entry. Hugs, Bunny
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Very thought provoking I must say. Excellent imagery and emotion throughout. This is brilliant
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A very stunning write! Very beautiful imagery, metaphors and alliteration. There is much posotivity n your write tpp.
A Wonderful entry. Thank you so much for sharing.
Gaylene
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As always, you leave me much to ponder and consider in your words. The almost mystical quality you've brought to the poem makes it enchanting to read, and just splendid in the wisdom it shares. You've truly set the bar this round, my friend.
Best of luck and much love to you,
~J.
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thank you so much, dear julie, for your encouraging words ... I am so happy to be in the semi-finals together with you and laura ...
much, much love,
maa
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Marion, this is truly beautiful. I am totally breath taken by this, good luck (though you do not need luck one bit)!
Chelsea
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thank you so much, dear chelsea, for your kind and caring words throughout this multiround-contest ... I will always hold you in loving memory ... you are a truly gifted poetess, one of the most creative young talents here on ap ...
I will certainly see you around ...
much love,
maa -
well, I guess I do need luck ...
with only four of us left, surviving each round has become a true challenge ...
maa
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I felt like I was taking a journey, into that element with you, and seeing, feeling, rejoicing in its' glory!
Akasha is such a mysterious and gentle spiritual element, that most would be hard pressed to reach it, but it's not impossible. you've brought Akasha into full focus here. You are indeed a Wise Woman, and I echo Laura's sentiments! Good luck in the contest!
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thank you so much for your kind words, dear hetha ... all the merits go to the sages and rishis who have explored this subject in depth and have shared their wisdom with us ... I have only transformed their teachings into poetic verse ...
maa
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This felt like a teaching from a wise one....whispered, yet honest and firm. I read it like the education that it is and absorbed every word, feeling somewhat enriched in understanding when it was done. I enjoyed this gentle journey and I'm grateful for the knowledge. I wish you the best of luck in this contest sister mine. Laura x
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thank you so much, my dear sister laura, for your profound comment and kind words of appreciation ...
sister maa
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Wow! This is a spectacular write, Marion.
You have written it beautifully with wonderful imagery and metaphors. Very creatively explained.
An enjoyable read.
Harrisham Minhas
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thank you so much, beautiful lady, for your welcome visit and your encouraging words and applause ...
maa
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