Thesis
Yawning the Abyss - As Time Slips By
As time sleeps by love’s tide [s]weeps sluggard, cold,
Slow beats heart's flow, forgets dreams' heats once sought.
Then, fragile, faith wraith cobwebs spins, sins caught
In Time’s equation web. Where once soul bold
Made music wild, filed, passion dims, short-sold.
Existence pales, stales, fails, - loves tales abort -
Sheds goals, gaols aims at joys ‘chance’ might have brought -
Little cares how life’s tale may unfold.
Inspiration wanes, fears stranglehold,
Plaintive soul retreats to shell, distraught,
Second hand experiences, thought,
Buy time, dismiss love from life's centrefold.
Yawning the abyss which, biding time,
shall swallow every line and every rhyme.
Antithesis
Yen to Advance - As Time Passed By
As time drifts by Love’s tide flows coward, cold,
Slow beats sad heart, lost far from dreams once sought.
Too little lust, - blades rust, in cobwebs caught -
In time fires dim which once, in times of old,
Moved untamed ecstasy, flame bold.
Existence paled until encounter brought
Potency restored, fresh friendship taught
A focus fresh, let energies unfold.
Some dreams break free of seeming stranglehold
Spirit released, appeased at last as thought
Experiences fresh feelings. Where distraught,
Denied soul access to life's centrefold.
Bright chance encounter sets in timeless motion
Yen to advance, to share inspired emotion...
Author notes
Acrostic Sonnets AS TIME SLIPS BY AS TIME PASSED BY
In a list
- Acrostics • next in list
- Time and Cause & Effect • next in list
- Sonnets • next in list
- Love and Affection • next in list
- Alphabetical Order • next in list
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You set up the atmosphere with your introduction beautifully as your lines just flow like the waves lapping the shoreline.
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freakishly amazing.
I read it over and over. Mostly because I didn't get it. Ha! Just kidding of course! But seriously... I was blown away after each stanza, and after each ending of each sonnet. I'm taking applications for a mentor, and you dear sir, need no application. Grab the "help wanted" sign off the window! -
just beautifull
awesome poem i love it
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Outstanding
This has so many different thoughts and emotions, your poetry is full of imagery, unexpected nuances and a sense of the spirit being refreshed with time. The second sonnet was so sad to begin with, world weary and yet the poem ends on a positive note with a sense of inspiration moving forward.
I loved the last line of the first stnza
shall swallow every line and every rhyme.
Maybe The abyss yawns which biding patient time
to iron out the iambic pentameter.
A great flow and spiritual message.
. Rewarded 8
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I'm printing this to read it over again....
U know I love you, I'm sad when I say that...
Just some rightbrained rambles from me, as time goes by flowing abyss fyies, skies and dawn sets--- I succk
u make me outt of my mind, I wanna make love to you
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"As time sleeps by love’s tide grows sluggard, cold,
Slow beats the heart, forgetting dreams once sought.
Then, fragile, faith soon spins its cobwebs - caught
In Time’s equation web."
Ahhh, dear Scribe...Time has no effect on the truest of hearts...yes, passion may ebb & flow, but the love remains pure; even more so after being tested by the flames of adversity...This is a lovely acrostic sonnet, my Friend...Very impressive penning, Sweetie...Good luck in the contest...
Wanda
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Quick and very good
Thank you for the entry and the speed that you were able to achieve in writing this. Good luck in the contest, your the best so far! LOL Shaker
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