You gift me a rose, pure lilly white
Wrapped up in copper, metallically bright
You gift me a smile, held up with fish hooks
You give me the first of your dubious looks
Chorus:
And I say, hey, just why can't it be like before
Why, can't I find my own strength anymore
Hey, just let it done and the last
Of you, will rest in my present and past
'Cause every time you look this way, the knife is turned another stain, just mars the page of yesterday
Let's see it all another way
Chorus:
But hey, just why can't it be like before
Why, can't I find my own strength anymore
Hey, just let it be done and the last
Of you, will rest in my present and past
-Small instrumental break-
-Instrumentals cut out completely and the chorus is sung-
-Instrumentals return and the chorus is repeated-
I wonder if your parts still ready to be played
Auditions were held just the other day
Chorus (softly)
Chorus: Normal
End
Author notes
This has a slight personal meaning, the audition part refers to the feeling my friends play different roles or parts in my life, so the loss of one is very sad. However, my callousness is reflected in that at one point in the peace the suggestion is made that the friend can simply be replaced by someone capable of fufilling the same role, in my case, temporarily making me feel happy.
Please tell me what you think
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o.0 Wow. I liek it alot. Its a noce song an di liek teh way that it all went today and the way it was different =D Think it was an awesome piece!!! =D
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You say that it is cliche, but i don't think so it very oringnal and song writing is nothing like writing a poem, poems you can write in five minutes song takes months, take it from someone who knows, all the parts and pieces you've got to get fitting perfectly, it's really hard cause a song is made up of so many pieces it's like a giant puzzle, but you've done awesomely and i couldn't really get the tune either, but that casue it had so many possible tunes, so Good JOb!!!
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wow i like alot...just wish i could figure the tune our...i suck at finding tunes thats why i cant write songs...lol well i like it alot
~**Phyre~
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Hmmm
It's very cliche I note but since it was somewhat of an attempt to write a song very mainstream in feel perhaps that is not a negative thing. I did however want it to be decent and upon re-reading it for myself I note that it's mainstream and cliche feel does seem to detract from any emotion or experience found in it and generally just makes it fairly ineffectual and really rather shitty.
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