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the prices you pay for letting down your guard

sea tides,
    pianos chiming in shimmering key;
memories lost to the life of a hero,
          "it reminds me of us"
questions go unanswered,
  your voice has become little more than a memory.
"because I would go through all of that for you..."

    your words fade to nothing;
promises unkept when little more was meant
        than a signal flare for the moment.
  my place taken by a body swimming in an enclosed sea
of tile and chlorine.

    nothing comparable to my body,
          swimming miniscule in a vast ocean tide,
  swept away, a little too wild for your tastes.


    I always knew it was coming,
but I didn't think you could forget me this way.

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  • PrettyBlueJeans
    August 16, 2007
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    i really like this. but i couldnt explain which parts or why, i just really really like it a lot.