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Sand bath

  Sand storm moving in
         
  As a mobile screen, divides land.

  Traffic movement slows down
       
  In poor visibility. 
 
  Many are trapped in the dune.

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  • Rebekah-Ann silver member
    November 27
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    oh my!! This is a lovely poem! I enjoyed the imageray and could place myself in the midst of this sandstorm! The terror of being trapped! You captured the emotion very well here!

    Take care
    Becks


  • DogFish silver member
    December 13, 2008
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    ...awsome!


  • trekkergirl
    October 23, 2008

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    This is very short indeed but it says a whole lot about sand stories. It uses imagery very well. I really like it. Thanks for entering my contest.


  • poetic-enigma21
    July 25, 2008

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    true description of the scene , sand dumes can surely be a mess to handle
    thanks for sharing
    cheers


  • Walking shadow
    June 26, 2008

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    I seen some sand storms on Youtube

    I seen some of those sand storms, man just will cut you down, wind blowing sand in your face...does not sound very fun.


  • azure85 gold member
    July 27, 2007

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    This is a very good description of a sand storm, and what happens to the drivers within one. I like how you added shape to your haiku, nicely done.


  • bengalibelle
    July 26, 2007

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    Hey, didn't expect to find you here.Liked your haiku, nice subject, maybe could do something with L2 to really slow it down? Just a suggestion!All the best.

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