As i cut through their soul i take it slow not knowing how or why they need to die. as they weep and go into a forever sleep they die but i don't cry. My conscience is shattered my feelings, no more all i care for now is blood and gore. I feel their heart beat one last time playing over and over like a rhyme. I think i am clean i think i am pure but really with death i need more. and as they take me away and i am being hung i think "why did i kill all of the young? No more words to role off their tounge." they lay dead no more life, no more excuses all they are is bloody and useless. They died and others cried and i think of how i lied i said i never i didn't but they know it's not true all of the lies and now it's my turn to be through. No more sick humor or blood thirst i was worst of the worst but now im gone and it wont be long till another comes in the dawn.
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Awesome!!This is a very good poem. I think this is great. Very good detail.Great description. Maybe a bit more capitalization.But this is very good.Nice flow. I lliked reading it.
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nice very good
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Niiice.
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This is so raw! I love it :-)
Great write. Amazing write.
Best of luck to you!!
Leslie
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WOW> THis is so good. I love it. I love how you got into a serial killers perspective. The idea is so creative. You did an amazing job. THe depth of this poem is so astounding
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I agree the rawness made it the images stand out. Good feel to it. I think form it would have made it flow better but good write. ~ MyKey
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I like it alot, very rough and straight to the point...break it up a little or keep it like this...I like it this way..^-^ but other then that I lvoe d it..
good luck
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