Beautiful may only describe the finite
of Gaia's ways, steps of omission cause
minds to falter upon a saunter sweet to
trek her understanding and conquer her depth.
Merely tossing her head coaxes creation, spitting life
unto blooms of gardenia; fragrant as the easterly
breaths she weaves into the air from the oceans
mist and dirge of sound from wind and waters ebullient foment.
Gently she coheres the mountain range, domineering,
stonewalled demeanor to placate and form into shape,
by a mere touch. Softly spoken tongues, forgotten past
infancy, intones the water where to roam, ranges high and low.
Beautiful may only describe the finite
of Gaia's ways, steps of omission cause
minds to falter upon a saunter sweet to
trek her understanding and conquer her depth.
Author notes
Never Fall in Love, is the better of the two. Fresh write in freeverse, I hope I can make you a believer.
Please tell me what you think
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I could read this for days, and not grow weary of reading it...
This is simply an amazing piece of mastery in motion. I really love how you just run with your thoughts, and put such elegance into your work, Deindichter. It's so refreshing to read something that can bring about new meaning every time it's read, depending on what angles you read it from. It's truly brilliant writing.
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I do agree that free verse has a lot of options that rhyme simply cannot offer
You have a lot of imagery and each line is deeper than it seems.
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This is really a very nice poem my head is spinning a little so it is hard to really sit down and cratigue but i love the flow and will get back to you soon as
to Ap fam
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Creative
I love "Merely tossing her head coaxes creation". And uses the word 'gently' in reference to Mother Nature puts things in perspective.
I liked it very much.
Patty
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'Twas Beauty Killed the Beast
Your analysis is correct for the better part of my understanding. You convey that "falling in love" is actually not what it is referred to at all in that superficiality has come to rule man's translation. Very astute of you to notice. Logic and cleared sights make a great poet amazing in that he or she can see deeper than the human instinct allows. Love must be felt not seen in the mind, or described using a body, unless analogically of course. Poetry is considered difficult because it is laborious for most to see without their eyes or even their mind's eye. -
Please keep up this great standard of writing,you have created something you can read again and again and find different things in it, well done and best wishes
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Amazing is all I can say about this, it is just..I'm at a loss for words sorry.
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I love your use of imagery, well done
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Thanks :-)
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wow this is brillant!
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You are one talented young man. Once again, your imagery is strikingly original and refreshing, and the farthest thing from cliche. Your vocabulary is rich, and your phrasing and word placement really impeccable in this poem. Your love of nature seems to have put you in touch with some deep well spring of creation and an ancient type of language. Best of luck in the contest with this remarkable poem.
David Michaels
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I liked this very much. I tend to agree with the meaning and beauty you have placed on the screen here. It had a nice flow and was easy to understand and the imagery was amazing. I wish i had your talent. Best wishes for the contest. I think this piece deserves it.
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