Kiss the moon
Taste the night
Something so wrong
But then so right
Take off with the wind
Feel the breeze
Lick my lips
It's time to please
Wonder the streets
Find a lost soul
Stare him down
My eyes dark as coal
Talk him up
Take him home
Then stay silent
Let his mind roam
All alone
No one around
I smile to myself
Not making a sound
Play with his hair
Lean in for a peck
Vear off to the side
And bite his neck
I hear his scream
His scream of pain
I giggle to myself
In the bloody rain
Lick my fingers
Smile with delight
Enjoy the taste
His screams become light
As his life leaves
Kiss his lips
Drink his blood
In hungry sips
Leave him dry
Burn his remains
Look at the beauty
As his ashes rains
A contest entry
- Calling all: (roll the dice and) Vampire fans!!! by IndividualEleven.
750 points, ended July 27, 2007, 18 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I want you best horror by LordVampirEternal.
375 points, ended September 5, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Vampires of Darkness creatures of the Night Reveal your Wings, Fly away with Me! by ennovy.
700 points, ended September 10, 2007, 14 entries
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Please tell me what you think
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I see you know how to fly at night, and feed delightfully...Thanks for entering my contest...novy
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Very well done terrific rhyme scheme it flowed well and i loved the wording great job ty for entering and good luck
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bloody enthusiastic
very good dark vampire celebration poem.
you portray the carefree enthusiasm and bloody enjoyment of the vampiress so well.
very good rhyming and structure.
great atmosphere of the vamp playing with her helpless prey.
and clearly projected bloody imagery.
i particularly like your great opening verse...
**Kiss the moon
Taste the night
Something so wrong
But then so right **
your vampiress is not grim, dour and bemoaning her cursed undeath: she loves her warm raw meals!
i will be reading more of your poetry later when i get time.
thanks. best wishes
mm
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Wow, the perfect stalk, and done according to the rules too, well done!!!! this is what I was looking for, the moment of the stalk, touching on both sides of the right and wrong, but continuing on with what nature intended for the beast, and the pleasure of being that immortal, nicely written, thanks for entering, loved your imagery and story you created - Jacen.
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good job
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Good job!! I love how you showed exactly what the girl's (female vampire?) intentions were. You can sort of read her mind, see her pleasure at the victim's pain.
-chelsea
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