We went to Busch Gardens one day
And went straight to Kumba
For the first ride
When we were put in the seats
We could not see
Who was operating the coaster
But we did not freak out
Until half way to the first drop
When we looked down
And saw a squirrel with a crazy face
We got down the first drop
Then started to speed up
To what felt like 100 mph
My stomach is starting to churn
I think I may hurl
Please God
Get me off this thing
We went upside down
And through cork screws
At what felt like 120 mph
We were going so fast
That the ride
Only lastest maybe 10 seconds
We went from what felt like 140 mph
To a sudden halt at the end
Oh man, now I think I got whiplash
As we were all getting off
Dizzy like no tomorrow
Making our way for the bathroom
All we heard was that looney squirrel's laughter
Author notes
LOL I just thought this up. Actually been thinking it out most the day.
4. Anything that will make me laugh so hard I fall off my chair!!!
A contest entry
- Make Her Laugh!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! by Talking Toni.
800 points, ended March 12, 2008, 25 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Cheer Up My Daughter. by Poetryintheblood.
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Honorable mention
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Bronze trophy winner
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Lol! This was pretty good. Very enjoyable to read. I hope that you read the rules that if you make it on my finalists list you must participate in Round 2 which will come shortly after this contest. Thanks so much for entering and best of luck to you!
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haha. this is cute. I like how you wrote it. Squirrells are so cute! lol. Very nice work, keep it up! Congratulations on your honorable mentions... and thanks for entering my contest. Best of luck!
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I loved it! this was funny! I couldn't stop laughing! WOW! I loved it! 
OMG! i loved it! lol it was hilarious! Keep up the good work! thanks for entering and good luck in my contest!
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thank you very much for this entry into the contest and i wish you the best of luck in the judging process. viyanna rosemarie
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lol omg this was hilarious!!! i loved it! the pic is really cute too. this one made me laugh out loud after i read the first few lines. keep up the good work! thanks for entering and good luck in my contest!
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LOL You have a wonderful imagination!!! The humor is delightful in your poem. Thank you for sharing in my contest.
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LOL! we came across a gang of drunk squirrels today i swear! crazy critters indeed! thanks for the entry
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Thank you for your fun entry, good luck in our contest, Josie & Kiarna
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well its quite funny good luck in my contest
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Pretty funny!
Good luck in your contests!
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I guess it's silly season ...
and maybe that will be enough. We'll see.
Thanks for entering.
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This Is Cute
I love to go on rides. What a great imagination. This was funny and I loved this very much. The ending was great, All we heard was that looney squirrel's laughter. Thank you for sharing some laughter with me.
Blessings
Kelle Marie
stavykm
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A Looney Story!!!!!!!!!
This was hystercal!!! I am sure it is just what the doctor ordered for Kelle!!! Thanks for your entry and the best of luck in the contest!!!~~Toni~~ -
this entry was going to be one of the three that won a trophy, im sry i didn't get to move this up to a higher placing
great piece
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great write, made me laugh so much!!!!!!!!!! Good luck in the contest.
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OMG, this is so funny! Aww, now I feel like I want to go on a roller coaster lol. I love the little picture at the top! It puts the icing on the cake. Thank you so much for brightening my day with this wonderful write!!! Best wishes in the contest.
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The rat with a fluffy tail really got you! Haha. Pretty interesting. If this particular squirrel can operate a roller-coaster, then my dog can probably perform a brain surgery.
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Lol! I think I would have to freak out if an evil demon squirrel attempted to kill me while stealing the job of carnival worker guy and taking over the rollar coaster and loving the power. But thanks just me.
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Haha...wow...squirrels operating roller coasters?
Ther're out to get you...in fact...I've calculated that the squirrels will take over the world in the year 2028... -
Hehe. That was great.
Really enjoyable poem.
Great job!
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