Her seductive form cringed tight with discard
As my whispered requests flow through her brain
Complacent hands with no further regard
Familiarity was her refrain
Unaccustomed event, sexual pain
A gentle pleading simplistic request
Sexual whim arisen, questions remain
Debating the outcome, embrace the test
Entry Lubricated, slight moans that contest
Labored breathing, from probable pleasure
Passionate love mark to distract from ingress
Erotic stimuli, beyond measure
This fetish encounter performed with care
Desirous fixation, derrière
Author notes
The Spenserian sonnet combines the Italian and the Shakespearean forms, using three quatrains and a couplet but employing linking rhymes between the quatrains, thus
abab bcbc cdcd ee.
Certain qualities common to the sonnet as a form should be noted. Its definite restrictions make it a challenge to the artistry of the poet and call for all the technical skill at the poet's command. The more or less set rhyme patterns occurring regularly within the short space of fourteen lines afford a pleasant effect on the ear of the reader, and can Create truly musical effects. The rigidity of the form precludes a too great economy or too great prodigality of words. Emphasis is placed on exactness and perfection of expression.
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im not really going to comment on the first 3 stanzas
as im not a fan of formal stanzas though i admire your use of classical form(I had to look up spenserian sonnet- i learn somethin new everytime im here)
but i can tell you i LOVED the last two lines....they gave it a real quirk that made me laugh
This fetish encounter performed with care
Desirous fixation, derrière.
fantastic
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LOL!!! One of many crazy fetishes I write about
I express almost all of them. Mostly metaphorically 
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Mykeee, This is a very sensual write indeed. Erotica done so tastefully is always a pleasure to read. You did this with such tenderness and it was quite stimulating to say the least. The rhythm and rhyme are superb and your elegant use of verbiage gave it a smooth flow most definitely. You have a gift for the written word and it shows through in all I have read from you thus far. Keep that golden ink flowing. Love and God bless you my friend, Joyce
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Thank you - Erotic doesn't have to be vulgar or laced with profanity. That shows a lack of creativity. Just like comedians that use language to shock. I try to shock with beauty and something most women don't normally get from men. Just something I try hard to do. Thanks for the great words and encouragement ~ Luv ~ Michael
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I couldn't agree more and you do bring forth a beauty that is rare. You're quite welcome and thank you once again. Joyce
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Sensual & Hot
Beautifully done,
The chemistry between them sent shivers down my spine.
WOW!
Hugs onesugar
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Thx - this was a little fantasy/taboo that I wanted to write a little tastefully to see if I could get the point across without actually saying what it was...hugs & waves ((~~~)) mykey
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Speechless
You have done a wonderful job here showing off your many talents for writing erotic poetry and you have done it in good taste, not one trashy word, two lovers trying something they have never done together before, the care and tenderness he takes with her, shows how much he cares and wants to make it pleasurable for her as well, excellent write, thank you for sharing and keep them coming.
raingoddess
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Beautifully Penned Erotic Sonnet
Amazing vivid write of the tender intimacies between a man and woman. You have chose your words, to stimulate and tantalize the readers. Hot & sexy....done in excellence........novy
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My-key
You have done a perfect job, its just written beautifully with sensual touch...classic erotica.....novy
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Thank you novy - I wanted to be sexual but not raunchy, a little taboo but in an artistic way. I hope that it came across that way ~ thanks again
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