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memory of a quiet revelry

after the cold clear water had cleaned us off we sat for a while behind the curtain of water, just together, alone in the moment together back to back no one spoke, just feeling the warm sensation of skin on skin above the cool moss of the rocks below as the contrast in temperature grew as we both dried off, the connection in thoughts grew until, as one we turned around, facing each other...

to gaze into each others eyes it was one of those moments where you both complete the other, without ever moving or speaking....

then she reached out, caressing my face slowly...

and i in turn complied likewise and, as we drew nearer, feeling the connection growing, now accompanied by a soft desire for the touch of the others body and soul we kissed in prayer, to allow each other entrance into the part of your soul meant for sharing...

and as the sensation of this meditative bliss unfolded so did the passion of another soul gliding silently in, to join yours inside.....

by this time we had finished kissing and were probably just caressing each other gently, though i like to spend more attention on the inner bonding than the physical aspect of it...

now that we had melded sufficiently on a etherical level we let our bodies do as they saw fit and left them behind....

we delved inside, to another plane, its sufficient to say we were not physical anymore and as essences we hung in the darkness of the abyss just being and adjusting for what was about to take place, preparing to fully give up the self image to fully coexist....

after an eternity in a moment we had become one

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its my first time writing like this, so any constructive criticism is welcome

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  • serenity silvermoon
    July 26, 2007
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    cute thanks for sharing


  • delightfulmess silver member
    July 25, 2007

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    I really liked this, very visual.
    I thought it would have made it better if you would have taken out of pargraph form though.
    It is hard to really feel a poem in its depth in this form...
    unless it is a book you can read. and curl up with. Just an opinion though. other than that I really enjoyed this piece very sesually pleasing


    Maybe if you just broke the line where ever you used these... just a suggestion

    Delila


  • Tyla-Tragedy
    July 24, 2007

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    wow.
    it's beautiful.
    I almost fely like i was there.
    I love this peice out of all.
    It's great.
    you really are an awsome writer.
    It's pretty.
    2 times