Build up emotions that turn to dust at my touch and
Run.
Could you ever be further than love is from me?
Surrender once more,
Just so I can hear you
Say it.
Have you ever wished it to be so so hard you
Die?
How does it feel to know that no matter where you go
I'll never be there?
I will never be yours,
What is more,
I never ever even
Loved you.
Do you lie
Awake at night and
Cry?
Do you wish so hard you almost
Die?
Do you ever hope that
I
Some day might change my
Mind?
I hope you do.
I hope you love me as much as I
Don't love you.
A contest entry
- Let your pen run free! by silverscent.
450 points, ended August 5, 2007, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think of my style of writing, rather than the context.
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Well I liked it
But I alway's like poems where there are questions within...to make the reader think, or give an answer to it in the head..you know..just as if it is written for you( the reader)
I think the subject is cliche for a lot of poets..but the most poems are formed by love and pain...so that doesn't change the way I feel about yours...
I loved it
XXJeannette
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I'm sorry if this sounds harsh, but I really do hate cliche poems. From my point of view this is nothing more; nothing less than cliche. Thanks for taking the time to enter but it isn't what I'm looking for in this contest.
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This is so, so, so HORRIBLE....LOL!!!! IN A VERY GOOD WAY THOUGH! I mean I wish sometimes that people would just be this damn honest...may I just say that for the record. i would rather someone just flat out say what is truly in their heart that to decieve me with some "bs", and not love me at all. This poem is so...well encouraging me to be more honest with people! Thanks for sharing this. Love it!. How can you not respect honesty?
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What an angry poem
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I suppose. But do you like it? *smiles*
If not the context, what do you think of my style? I would like to know how many people like it, and how many prefer something completely different, just so I know where I stand.
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