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nethuns

this is not the hour
it's a detour from the beaten path
a snail's pace is the sea shore, a sailor's breath
is evil laughing to the man on land

i am but a cloud
i am but a cloud









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  • layla.
    July 25, 2007

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    It's like having to dive in the sky with a deep breath. Did I make sense?

    Wonderful Bro.
    Hope all is fine.


  • Ryno
    July 24, 2007

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    Loved the ending and the priceless flow and feel to it... excellent piece


  • Celticmoon
    July 24, 2007

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    do my eyes deceive me?

    Wonderful to see your pen dance again hun.
    I adore how you always leave me in deep thought.
    Bravo!


  • Phineas Red
    July 24, 2007

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    Oh snap.
    Amazing.
    i am but a cloud...

    I think that's going to be my new phrase whenever anyone asks me to explain something.

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