Ocean silhouette,
Shadowed movement, brush on by,
Tangled in the weed of jumbled mind,
{{Broken souls and dried up glue}}
And every touch that ever tried, to cling to you, to reach inside,
The pale fingers, reach
scream
and brushed away,
One flick of motion, shadow of a shadow gone.
Creature of the deep,
Grainy into monochrome, flit around the darkest seabed corner,
The hard forgotten street corners,
that haunt you as you haunted them,
Twilight encounters, fade away
as sunlight filters in.
A thousand sets, all followed with sunrise,
Lying with the same suburban skies
Author notes
for sleeping nightmare; option 3
A contest entry
- Closing Some Time Today by Celticmoon.
450 points, ended July 25, 2007, 9 entries
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wow I love the language that you have used to describe this stage in your life. very powerful, especially loved the beginning.
Thanks for entering and goodluck
All the best
XHollowX -
this was really interesting! it shows magnificent imagery and I really enjoyed reading it. I think at some stage in our lives we all have dreams kind of like this..
Thanks for entering and good luck!
Sleep-N -
Very interesting! I know many that suffer nights as these. I, myself, cannot say that I recall such nights but I would not doubt it just because I can't recall it. Thank you for entering and good luck!
Blessings
Bel
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Magnificent!
Wonderful piece penned and what images You have brought forth
Love the dried up glue reference!
Wow! Powerful!!
Thank You for sharing this
Best wishes to You in the contest
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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Lovely metaphor - I really liked this: "And every touch that ever tried, to cling to you, to reach inside," (because it rhymnes lol) abd this "Broken souls and dried up glue." - Good Luck on the contest!
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