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A Thousand Wishes

 

 

A thousand stars fall like tears,
lighting up the sky.

She laughs and twirls,
small hands outstretched for balance,
eyes shining under the moonlight.

"Look Daddy! Look at all the wishes!"
She points up, grinning with delight.

The middle-aged man sits quietly on a bench,
his bones tired and aching.

He just smiles...




Author notes

A fairly unique specimen of my poetry. One of my favourites, I think.

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  • xxvampyregirlxx
    May 18
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    This is good I like it. Thanks for the entry and good luck in the contest


  • lindaburns gold member
    March 1
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    Lovely. It says so much in so few words. I like it a lot.

  • Samantha Amergirdol
    September 5, 2007
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    Simple but quite powerful, and nice use of imagery. A great write!

    Thanks for entering!


  • Kimojuno
    September 4, 2007
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    Wow .. wonderfully written and a perfect message; thank you so much for entering!

    Jeff.


  • arafura gold member
    July 28, 2007

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    wishes...

    This is excellent work poet! Very nice imagery evoked by some lovely word choices and fine structure and flow to the whole poem.
    Worthy trophy winner!


  • tru-luv
    July 24, 2007

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    I love this. It catchs a moment in life most people over look.
    She laughs and twirls,
    small hands outstretched for balance,
    eyes shining under the moonlight.
    Great write and extremely good flow.


  • esroddo silver member
    July 24, 2007

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    Congratulation On the Bronze

    Beautifully written, I love the concept and the title, That's what caught my eye. Thank you for sharing. (LISA)
    "Look Daddy! Look at all the wishes!"
    She points up, grinning with delight.

    The middle-aged man sits quietly on a bench,
    his bones tired and aching.

    He just smiles..."


  • Harrisham Minhas
    July 24, 2007

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    This is sweet and has vivid imagery.
    Congrats on your trophy!


  • PurpleLogic
    July 24, 2007

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    i like this poem a lot. you say its differnt from anything else youve written, and yet you right it so beautifully! i like the idea and think that you have pulled it of very well here. good write, well done and good luck in the contest!

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