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r t t a
u h n rope ……. t h e f l a s h l i g h t
t e i
snake
Author notes
a senryu
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turning
the snake into a rope
the flashlight
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Great imagery!
Thank you for entering HAIKU & SENRYU contest
This is the way I like to be touched visually
and mentally.
It's clever, smart and the AHHHHHHHHHH is there whre
it's supposed to be.
lovelightpeace
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Thank you for entering our workshop/contest, "The Shape of the Haiku." Good luck.
ning o
r t t a
u h n rope ……. t h e f l a s h l i g h t
t e i
snake
You are very good with the concrete from. I think that it is fantastic. I feel that the haiku however is made up more of a statement then sense images and the haiku normall does not use poetic devices. I might be wtong but I feel that you have used a metaphor in this one. -
I amazed by what you've accomplished by this image-less yet such a vivid image of a haiku, Maa...Both by the haiku itself and the PERFECT lay-out. Exquisite, even to the coloration!
Very best wishes to you in the contest!
Jo
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This is so unique and cool!! I really love this form
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These shape haiku's are so nicely done. And have have really produced a unique thought along with your shape. Very nicely done!
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This is really good, I bet you had fun creating this haiku too! Thank you so much for your haiku entry!
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Oh, this is perfect! I love it! You captured my fear of snakes and saved me with the light all with a few letters.
Love,
Amera ♥
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