I looked at the little child,
Who was almost begging for help,.
She wanted to know,
how to save her parents from death
I told her a little secret
Even though I could not help,
Her parents fate,
A bunch of little butterflies,
were circling her face.
I said,
"I know this isn't easy
But it is the truth I must tell.
Do not mourn your parents
Cherish the memories of them,
For they surely wish you well."
The little child cried,
But knew the mysterious lady was right,
That her time with her parents,
Was to be her lifes light.
Author notes
I have read the rules...
option #2
A contest entry
- MYSTERY LADY by Darc Soul.
700 points, ended August 10, 2007, 8 entries
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Comments
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OMG I am so sorry I forgot your clappys.
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such a sad poem that you wrote. but you know the way you wrote it was beautifully done. I like the third stanza and I felt like that applied to me as well. going through something similar with past memories of my own mother.
this is an excellent poem. great job and good luck in the contest.
kat
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Wow ~ Excellent job ~ so sad ~ but you've made it so beautiful ~
I truly think theses lines could someday be passed on for generations to come as a message of consolement.
"I know this isn't easy
But it is the truth I must tell.
Do not mourn your parents
Cherish the memories of them,
For they surely wish you well."
The little child cried,
But knew the mysterious lady was right,
That her time with her parents,
Was to be her lifes light"
OMG ~ that is by far the VERY best part of the poem. I still liked the first part~ and understand your setting it up ~ for the last two stanza's ~ but you wow'ed me on the last two !!!
Excellent job~ Thanks so much for entering the "Set the bar" contest ~ I do appreciate you sharing your work with me ~ good luck to you -
Now this one dear is really good I like it I am sure that Creations will probably too. Thanks for hanging in there with us we can be tough lol. Good Luck with this one
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Thanks ^_^
I'm a pretty determined person, I don't give up to easily, lol. ^_^
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"She wanted to know,
how to save her parents from death
I told her a little secret"
I love the whole theme of this poem. It's just so sweet with the little girl.
Thank you so much for entering my contest.
Always,
Cassie
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Thanks a lot!
Thanks for commenting on my poem! I wwrote this quite a long time ago,heh? lol
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good poem you have written
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