The invisibility slowly takes over,
I sit and wonder if you even see me,
As I sit and think,
I wish that you might see me.
The invisibility only happens with you,
When your around I feel completly invisible,
You make me feel so good but bad,
How'd I let you get to me?
Oh well theres nothing I can do,
My hearts decided,
I feel so invisible when your near,
Please make the feeling change.
Only you can make the feeling go away,
Maybe one day you'll notice me,
I doubt it but theres always hope,
Hope that you and I could be one.
I'm so invisible so you don't see,
The invisibility within my day,
Soon maybe the feeling will go away,
But no matter what I'll remember.
I'll remember the way you made me feel,
The invisibility of a young girl,
You make me feel this way,
But then you smile.
That smile makes me melt,
If only it were directed toward me,
But for now I'm still invisible,
Invisible til you notice me.
Author notes
YourGaurdianAngel
i wrote this poem a while ago. but seeing as how almost of my older poems got lost(stupid me!) i have had to write new ones. which isnt bad but id love to find my old ones to compare the new ones too.. lol. well this is one of the few i can find. and i just found it. lol. thank god for internet and random sites to post poems =]
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wish that you might see me. as a suggestion instead of using see at the beginning and here use a different word.
also if this had little breaks in it...instead of one long paragraph..it could look like this
The invisibility slowly takes over,
I sit and wonder if you even see me,
As I sit and think,
I wish that you might see me.
The invisibility only happens with you,
When your around I feel completly invisible,
You make me feel so good but bad,
How'd I let you get to me?
Oh well theres nothing I can do,
My hearts decided,
I feel so invisible when your near
Please make the feeling change.
Only you can make the feeling go away,
Maybe one day you'll notice me,
I doubt it but theres always hope,
Hope that you and I could be one.
I'm so invisible so you don't see,
The invisibility within my day,
Soon maybe the feeling will go away,
But no matter what I'll remember.
I'll remember the way you made me feel,
The invisibility of a young girl,
You make me feel this way,
But then you smile.
That smile makes me melt,
If only it were directed toward me,
But for now I'm still invisible,
Invisible til you notice me.
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it is kinda weird lookin i know...but its just an opinion. and it doesnt have to be these specific breaks...create your own.
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please put ur AP name in the authors notes ur poem is removed until then
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sorry
i forgot.
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I thought this poem was very interesting and very good. I wonder if it's real ... *makes mental note to ask but knows I will forget* Seriously hun keep writing.
Megan -
very sad, but full of lots of real raw emotions. good poem
Kelcey
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