Snowflakes in my tea and
resting upon your lip -
that moment before they melt,
before they disappear
become a vague cool wetness,
on your skin!
It sends a bittersweet wince
through the body to see
such impermanence,
such lovely temporality,
very much like a kiss.
Falling, they are caught
in your hair and
i am a snowflake now,
from now i will ever be -
crystalline jewel landed in your tea.
A contest entry
- Snowflakes In My Tea by Pamela A Lamppa.
2800 points, ended July 28, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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The second stanza really pulls all this wonderful imagery together and blends it with beautiful metaphor. Enjoyed! Blue
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I love the imagery in this, quite descriptive in a quirky kind of way, The second stanza is my fav, no wait they are all my fav! this is beyond beautiful. The last line ties it up quite nicely!
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Wonderful
A stunning entry for my contest. OH I do like this very much! You captured me with the snowflakes resting on the lip. Wonderful vision as it quick melts. Superb imagery.
I like that!
Your last two lines are perfect. You may want to capitalize I in from now I will ever be. . . (plenty of time to do that)
Truly a fabulous entry and exactly what I am looking for in this contest. 16 wonderful lines of poetry. Well done and thank you for entering my contest. ~Pamela
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