Enter in the darkness cold
Decrepit halls and floors of old
Seeing red of the Dreaded Mother
You must reply, “Sanguine, my brother.”
Here the carnage has been spread
As told of other contracts dead
Tearing flesh and entrails flow
You have new duties, now you must go!
Find him now and make him pay!
String his corpse up by the bay!
Let all know whom we supply
“The Unholy Patron!” they will cry
Return and cure the ailments now
Wipe the blood off from the brow
Then talk with him who lusts for life
Take the contract with this knife
A knife that holds daedric power
Graze his neck and watch him cower
Charring skin falls from his frame
Death for him has slowly came
A letter from the Listener
That’s given to the Silencer
Purify...purify...purify
Die...die...they must all die!
The stomach turns in great remorse
Being the only desired force
To rid of traitors in the den
Yet all them you thought were kin
Dry your eyes and grab your bow
And forget the times that they bestow
Aim for her head and shoot her quick
Sounds of speared fruit full and thick
Strike this slow one in her sleep
With a blade of woe so very deep
Into her chest comes out a flood
She’s gagging on her scarlet blood
Lop their heads off one by one
Do not stop until its said and done!
Now upon the last dweller of the lair
The mentor locks in a deathly stare
Grapple, dodge, and slash!
His wounds are turning to ash
“Why would you do this?” cried the mentor
With eyes damp and heavy, you replied,
“Forgive me, my brother.”
Author notes
Based on the Dark Brotherhood of Oblivion...probably the best effing game I've ever played in my life!
Break My Heart
A contest entry
- playing devils advocate by Jiyo.
734 points, ended October 2, 2007, 10 entries
Honorable mention
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excellent write. i love the flow and the meaning to this piece. thanks so much for entering
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Your welcome! I'm glad you liked it!
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GREAT
dude i effing love Oblivion and the dark brotherhood is my favorite guild, i'm glad i can find another to agree with me,lol. and this poem is pretty good to come from a video game,haha. i love how you included the part when you have to kill everyone to find the traitor. you should write a part two for the later parts when you get tricked into killing the black hand with the dead drop orders you receive
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Thank you for the comment!
Nice to meet someone else who likes the game. You do make a good point about a part two. I'm just not sure if it would be as much of an impact like this one was. I'm sure could up with something for that. I love writing about stuff like this. I miss Oblivion...*tear*sniff*
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The words tell of great carnage and horrible monstrosities...but the tone seems almost....light? Hah, to me it did. I think thats quite hard to do, but you pulled it off very nicely. It just seems to add...a tension of sorts to the poem. Thanks for entering!
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Thank you, carnage is one of my favorite things to write about
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nice work the poem fits your pic even though it is a prewrite good luck
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Thank you much!
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ok... this one is pretty darn dark and kinda twisted!! But i liked!! Great job and thanks for entering it. good luck!!
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Thanks jcat!
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Very well written poem!! best of luck
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Thank you for the chance!
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terrifying and graphic, yet still poetically put together, I like that, nicely done
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Thank you
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Escapism
I like this because it's different from the mushy stuff that often rules the waves of AP. I found interesting and creepy at the same time. I would love to see this approached as a short story so that way I could escape my boring day for much longer.
Well written and deeeeeeeeeep.
Terry
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I have given that thought, but I'm tired of writing fanfiction. I could write a similar story, just not based on what I know on this particular story. I do so relish the days when I can write of page of descriptive carnage. I miss those days actually. Thank you for the comment.
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Hannah! I LOVE this! Mmmmm, carnage! Takes me to a happy place! I'm going to hug you deathly!
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And I shall hug you deathly back! RAWR!
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Much lovefor this one, its quit lovly yes? haha
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Why thank you lovely
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Wow Amazing description and your flow is awesome. -Damien
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Thank you kindly!
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