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Under the bog lights of a winter swoon
a spine on a redwood cane
up the words sprang
Tereu
the four oars of Dr. Who’s crane,
the things which appear in the dark,
Romano in white scarf
boarding the ark
the ramp slick with residue;
the howls of pain. all mixed
up inside. The muscles grind
against the swollen testicles
Albert chews on rotten swine
it’s past time.

Lil gathers the spent teeth
to plant them in the garden.
There was the sound of the cards
hitting the pavement at an angle
while the powerful cars swept by
the childrens’ lidless eyes were insistent
mordant waiting for the knock upon the door,
the wretched hump of Father’s stump
running from the world.
“Leave him alone”, they would shout
when the dogs growled
and the women prowled about,
the spatial anomaly.

in the shadow of the moon
and the vacant rooms
it was very clear,
but it all escapes me, now.


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Notes: See old Tom Eliots; The Wasteland, and the British TV Series, Dr. Who.

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  • just rob gold member
    August 2, 2007
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    Congrats

    on whipping me soundly, and welcome to my faves list.

    GOOD STUFF!

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    July 31, 2007
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    Should I say more than wow?


  • passionvine
    July 27, 2007

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    I reckon I never did make through an entire episode a Dr. Who. I know I tried over and over, but couldn’t rightly make out the narrative. I just remember the red telephone booths and his on hair and all kings of images and what not – I watched it over and over I remember that and came away with nuthin like a story – jes emotions and images – maybe like this here poem.

    I did watch Lost in Space with devotion akin to religion. The Preacher lowed it was sinful. I think I wanted Penny to be my girlfriend, and the Robot my protector, and I thought Jonathan Harris was the greatest actor in the universe. I ustah magine him playin all the parts in the Shakespeare plays I found in Grandma Cooper’s basement. It were Uncle Teddy’s who still had the shakes from World War I, and he didn’t read nuthin no more so they let me keep the book. Mos folks would not know that Cooper were a great grandman and Teddy a great uncle ceptin prolly you – but jes in case low country people read this I thought I’d stick it in here.

    This here be pot liquor, I’ll be back from time to time to dip some corn bread innit.

    Peace.


  • VirginiaDarling
    July 24, 2007
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    Wow I think this is a great write. It sounds so real, very nice work, keep it up.


  • myrataal silver member
    July 24, 2007

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    Perhaps shattered love can be changed by science fiction ...

    and timelines crossed by someone like me who never write fiction What do you say, Poet?

    I guess all fragmented memory bit(e)s on electronic chips may one day explode into realness, no matter what fantasies agony may produce.

    A shatteredness in this poem, a stumping father leaving, sleepless children and emptiness the only remains, while the ever present moon, as symbol of the sensual and the bodily, in its evasiveness echoes the soul in search of meaningful wholeness.

    I loved the subtle internal rhyme, the alliteration and assonance and the way this poem read as if it is a surreal nightmare.

    So much like life itself.






  • Amanda1
    July 24, 2007

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    Not quite sure where the inspiration came from for this piece but I thought it very interesting. Really enjoyed the terminology used and the way tone of this write. Excellent work here.


  • amaranthine lover gold member
    July 24, 2007

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    this is awesome


  • NurseChilly gold member
    July 24, 2007

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    yay.... i love Dr Who... I used to watch it from behind the sofa when i was a little girl.. it's been there with me girl and woman...

    and the tardis... i always wanted one...
    what self respecting time traveller wouldn't want to be a time lord and time traveller... huh???

    this made smile.. and ponder too.. much pondering infact

    funny how life changes and stays the same too... weird science



  • cvillelisa
    July 24, 2007

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    You have been posting too many poems. It is one thing for someone without anything to say to post too many poems it is clearly another for anyone with everything to say to post too many poems. My head hurts. Not that that is a horrible thing either of course. Just so much to think about.

    You know, sometimes a poets symbols are out of whack with the his audience. And it takes time (in the man-made sense) for the language to translate into meaning. Sometimes a reader, like the poet/artist etc. must leap leap with the artist. Now that doesn't always mean the two are leaping in the same direction - but the key is to leap.

    I don't know Dr. Who at all. but I sure know this:

    in the shadow of the moon
    and the vacant rooms
    it was very clear,
    but it all escapes me, now.


    And for the music this is. I grok. Gladly.

    I don't need to know because what I know, I'm sure I don't. Really. So I'm good with letting go .. and flying.



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