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My name is Leonardo

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My name is Leonardo

My name is Leonardo, on canvas I shall paint,
the image in the mirror, making people faint.
I want to paint myself, the way I really am.
I want to be a woman and I don’t give a damn.

The image in the mirror, making people faint,
as I see my reflection, I know I’m not a saint.
I’ll paint it with a smile so all the world can see,
the artist with his brush in hand, isn’t really me.

I want to paint myself, the way I really am,
acting like a gentleman, has all been just a scam.
My name is Leonardo and I love to wear a dress;
give them a little smile and I will make them guess.

I want to be a woman and I don’t give a damn,
I love to flit around; as dainty as a lamb.
So I’ll paint a little smile and make it very quaint,
my name is Leonardo, on canvas I shall paint.

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Modified Retourne
Like so many other French forms, the retourne is all about repetition. It contains four quatrains (four-line stanzas). The trick is that the first stanza's second line must also be the second stanza's first line, the first stanza's third line is the third stanza's first, and the first stanza's fourth line is the fourth stanza's first. Retournes do not have to rhyme.
Form source: shadowpoetry.com

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  • Angel Of Heaven99
    September 24, 2007

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    This is a great and creative write. You did a good job on this. Thank you for sharing and entering it. Good luck!


  • micol
    July 29, 2007

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    Rhyme is hard enough; repeating lines even harder; but to do both and still have fun...that's an accomplishment. You've caught the intended(?) spirit of the painting...or at least reminded readers that even great artists can have some fun


  • poeticweaver gold member
    July 26, 2007

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    Wonderful,

    This made me -smile- awe, such a neat write!
    I enjoy the flow here within this poetic piece~
    What a delight to read, and thanks for sharing!

    Your new friend, and fan~
    -Timothy aka poeticweaver~ xo


  • Desire gold member
    July 25, 2007

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    Magnificent!

    I knew I had missed a piece so I stalked Your page to find it
    Love this and Gosh...My version is whacked
    I had written one a long time ago
    This had me chuckling

    The images are wilddddddddddd
    Just how I like them
    Speak the truth busy bee..Just say it loud
    Gorgeous Form~ Form Queen

    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • soulfultia gold member
    July 24, 2007

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    Your creative flare continues in this piece as well! This was fun and unique, gifting me a smile through your witty pen Loved it ~tia


  • Dalaney gold member
    July 24, 2007

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    lol...this is a TREASURE! I have always
    loved Leonardo. What a wonderfully
    twisted twist you have taken here with
    this entry. I promise you, I will never
    look at the Mona Lisa quite the same way
    again.... Love, Lane


  • Whoochi gold member
    July 24, 2007

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    Definitely made me smile and made me wonder too...lol..well done..form queen...Now I know why he/she is smiling..the real story comes out...High five to Leo! Good luck DOLLFACE!


  • PerVirtuous
    July 23, 2007

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    Massively funny! Please do more funny stuff. The Pepsi can, the headless doll, this... you are great at them. I want more, more, MORE!!! Please? Wonderful to see humor in classic forms. You are amazing.


    Three Bunnies (Curly, Larry, and Moe!!!)


  • Bazza
    July 23, 2007
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    Yeah, My muvver always told me that beauty is only as thick as a coat of paint, or sumthin..


    • Amera gold member
      July 23, 2007
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      Bazza

      hehe... thanks, I wanted you to know that I do have a lighter side.


      Amera ♥


  • RedAquarius
    July 23, 2007

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    Hahaha, this is truly quite amusing and I think this form fits the humorous angle quite nicely! Kudos!


  • HaleyMary
    July 23, 2007

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    lol. Great flow and creative. I think it's still a mystery who the Mona Lisa is. I like how you make it sound like Leonardo was painting himself as maybe who he wanted to be. Makes me wonder....lol Anyway, great write. Humorous. Good luck in the contest.


  • capricornpoet
    July 23, 2007

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    absolutely funny

    This brought a smile at every twist of the whimsy satire of the Retourne , it also reminds me of the pantoum form which has repeating lines..
    Very funny, poor Leonardo..I think he made a few spins in his grave ...perhaps a growl was heard by the locals lol....excellent comical satire..


  • JohnnyD gold member
    July 23, 2007

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    Amera, smiling......very well done cubbie of mine, very well done, you do know I used to work for Leonardo? I cleaned his brushes with trupentine and soaked them in Olive oil overnight so they would be supple. Few people know that Leonardo was the one who invented Queen size panty hose.



    Dad

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