If my brothers went away
For a year, a month, or just a day
If my mother had to leave
I would have to cry and grieve
Being home with mom and dad
It's like the circus, it makes me glad
I feel safe I feel strong
cause it's right where I belong
I'm at home, a place like no other
There's sibblings, a dad, and a kind, good mother
It's great there and I know
There's no place like home
Author notes
I am 9 years old. Option 3 amily. Did you like the poem???? please leave a comment even if you thought AWKWARD(tell me the part you thought was awkward)If you don't think it was awkward...Then...THANK YOU!
A contest entry
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300 points, ended July 23, 2007, 5 entries
Gold trophy winner
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525 points, ended August 19, 2007, 12 entries
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nice job! great poem! I'd miss my family to!
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I really liked this. I can tell it came from the heart-
Vivien
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very nice. And so true; there IS no place like home. Thanks for sharing this and entering my contest.
Good luck.
Brian -
Beautifully done! You did well in the flow of this. Bravo!
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You're right there is no place like home. I love being home with my family alot. what nice emotional poem for your family
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Congratulations on your first Gold Trophy! This first of many.
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Wow, you did outstanding! Thank you for your time and I wish you the best of luck in the contest
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I love it! You have great sense of rhythm for such a young poet. I like your rhyme as well. You will be a great poet like your mom. Keep writing everything you see, everything you feel, everything you dream. I'm so proud of you!
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Awww this is just beautifully sweetie, it has wonderful flow and rhythm, your rhyme is very well done and the emotion in the poem just speaks to your reader.. There is no place like home you are so right, and no one better to be with than a wonderful family. You have a lot of potential so I hope you keep up with your writing and I will be sure to stop by and read some more of your lovely work. Hugs, Bunny
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Thanks bunny.
im glad you like my poem.I hope that i might get something for it. p.s thanks for the points and being supportive
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