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Embrace me; Storm

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Restless ocean, hear me
ravage these shaded shores.
Rise tempest, beat ferociously
rage your storm tossed seas’
rain heavy, rein long;
rejuvenate my soul.

As I gaze up into the sky,
light rain begins to pelt my face
mixing water and tears,
I have longed for this moment
with arms open free.

Soothe these stifling shrills and
soak these stagnant senses,
stimulating a slumbering spirit.
Sanctify me and cleanse me,
so when time stands still these
seething storms shall subdue me.

For in that moment, clarity shall
be found, with crisp air of
fresh ozone gusting from the clefts,
I await for the incandescence of the sun
to pierce down and break the clouds.

Awaken this mind's eye and
answer this beating heart.
Ascend this dream into reality;

atonement for all my sins,
and wash me of all my fears
away into the convulsing sea.

Please appluad if you think it worthy, thanks.

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  • Knight70
    September 15, 2007

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    left me breathless.....

    You brought new meaning to "imagery" with this gorgeous piece.

    Restless ocean, hear me
    ravage these shaded shores.
    Rise tempest, beat ferociously
    rage your storm tossed seas’
    rain heavy, rein long;
    rejuvenate my soul.

    This first stanza stands on its own iron pedestal, and got me hooked on reading the rest of this brilliant work. I love to read about tumultuous seas and fevered rains. Fantastic work!!!!!!!!!! Out of the thirty-plus poems I have read today, this is my favorite.


  • grannyeri gold member
    August 2, 2007

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    Thought this an awesome picture and enjoyed reading the poem that you wrote to accompany it. Quite metaphoric it can be, yet some people do love storms and enjoy being there when they happen. Some great images you have shared in these lines - very descriptive words you have penned to get your point across.


  • Lady-Pegasus
    July 24, 2007

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    Thank you so much, this is a wonderfully unique piece contasing an astounding vocabulary and great poetic devices, Iespecially loved the rain/reign use, well done! One or two spelling oops but nothing major and easily repaired! Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors. Hetohke'e


  • PerfectImperfection
    July 24, 2007

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    A journey to find oneself in the cleansing. Well conveyed piece of emotions, lots of great imagery to represent the longing for release, and rescue. Nicely penned!

    [[ momrnt? moment; pierse? pierce]]


  • Talking Toni gold member
    July 23, 2007

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    Wow Jacen!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    Really nice job here!!!! It kind of reminds me of what it feels like when you are baptized. You know being cleansed, and renewed, and just reborn if you will.Your descriptive words just fell into place in this write. You just recreate yourself with every piece you write. You are an amazing writer!!!This is just spectacuar as always!!!! Thanks for sharing!!!~~Toni~~


  • Lady Altheia
    July 23, 2007

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    I too love the imnagery. This picture is awesome. I agree with Tawk, Lady P will love it and thank you for taking the time tio enter our contest.

  • tawk gold member
    July 23, 2007

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    Wow, this is amazing. So full of wonderful imagery and emotion. Such a wonderful write for Lady-Pegasus I know she will love it Good luck in the contest and thanks for entering

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