For the peace the children cry,
As wars rage by and by.
For the peace tears are shed,
For the peace and for the dead.
The scarlet blood dripping down,
Marks the streets and kills the joy.
The terrorized screams of another shot,
Echo through deserted streets.
For the peace the mothers cry,
As more sons die and die.
For the peace is our cry.
But why then is war considered alright?
A father dead,
A brother gone.
And for what, but another gun?
For the peace is the cry,
Held on up as generations die,
For the peace we march back on.
And for the peace we hear the death gong.
The blood and tears mingle together,
And what is lost is lost forever.
For the peace the children cry,
And still, guns are raised higher then high.
Please tell me what you think
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War is always senseless, Your poem points our the reasons why.
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My Verdict
I think this poem is really good. It's very sad and emotional. It made me feel sad, for all the people who died "for the peace". It flows pretty well, so good job on that. *claps* Well, bye. Keep writing poetry, you rock!
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i read it again, and it still amazes me, i found something though that you might want to check out... in the second to last stanza, the last line, it kind of goes against the rythm, it seems to me to be just one sylable too long... i probably didnt spell that right...
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Great...
don't see how I missed this one
Wow, you have a way with your emotions and words on here,
this is a wonderful write with plenty of truth
Thanks for sharing your entry, looking to see more
Ephiphany -
one word came to my mind first... damn... the sad thing is all of this is true, i love the emotion, and cant help but to think there is some reason for you writing this, and if its some horribly sad reason, or minutely sad for that matter... im sorry.
it remindes me of my friend, i moved away from them, and my friend is going into the navy this year, im worried for him, and wish him well, but you brought back some of my few good memories, thank you.
it also makes me think of a song ive heard..
'Like this war's really just another brand of war,
That doesnt cater the rich and abandon the poor.'
Keep up the good work... please...
~Nick
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Powerful piece! There is a lot of emotion in these lines. The imagery was strong. I loved the message you put behind this piece and the irony you wanted to put forward! Great job!
And for what, but another gun?
I loved that line. It was like a punch in the stomach, harsh but worth it, because all you wrote up there is definitely true! I liked the last stanza. You have a lot of powerful imagery and words in this piece. More than that, there is so much truth here!
Peace and war are opposite things, and yet, in a battle, it never really does matter. This poem made me sad, and angry at the same time- sad because there is so much sadness in every battle and war, angry because nothing is done about it.
I truly admire you for standing up and spreading the message around. You write beautifully! Great job!
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