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Silent Sanctuary

A child left alone
In a lonely field
To bare her own
Without a shield
No longer to see
 
A distant cry
Fading fast
Asking why
She was last
No longer free
 
Wondering thought
Non pleasant flash
A child has fought
Only to crash
In her sanctuary 
 
Chantelle M. DeJong 

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  • SilentMind
    July 24, 2007

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    I like this write, you're right the rhyme scheme is excellent. - rather a disturbing page border though.


  • Zephyr Aryn
    July 23, 2007

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    So sad; and yet a very good write. Nice job with the rhyme. Your piece has a good flow for reading, too.


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    July 23, 2007

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    This hurts the heart and brings up the tearsCry so many precious children suffer from the need of love and tender care...A child has fought Only to crash...Thank you for sharing this powerful piece with me:f:f:f