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Footprints in the sand...

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Standing in trance
near the ocean…
Overflowed by the water,
hypnotising waves
Purifying old memories…
To dissipate the loss,
tears, pain

Take a few steps back
screams the water
or else you drown

Shaking me up,
walking backwards

The footprints
in the sand
disappear

“Noooooo”…I cry to the waves;
Not hers!

When I look down
shivers of love
entice me
Right here,
in the burning sand

“Thank you”…I smile to the sand;
Because your footprints
are still there

In my heart…

 

 

 

 




 

Author notes

This is how my mind can drift....

S i m p l e G i r l




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Your footprints are still there...in my heart!

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  • paullallady silver member
    February 13, 2008

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    Wow, what a powerful poem of descriptiveness
    and emotion. You did an amazing job on this.
    good luck in the contest.


  • Danna Hobart
    February 10, 2008
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    Lovely.

    Thank you for entering.


  • mmistermeh
    February 5, 2008

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    Woo! I like this one, thank you for the entry!


  • Puppydog gold member
    December 1, 2007
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    SO VERY SWEET!!!!

    There is a soft and gentle sweetness in your words.


  • mysticstorm gold member
    November 29, 2007

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    What a wonderful tribute to a dear friend and sister...yes I have decide...no mater what others say we can pick our family in this world...for I have met a few that are that and more to me.
    This is a brillant write, this is what made me feel it so deeply:
    "When I look down
    shivers of love
    entice me
    Right here,
    in the burning sand

    “Thank you”…I smile to the sand;
    Because your footprints
    are still there

    In my heart…"

    This ending was awe inspiring and touching.
    Thank you for sharing your beautiful love of a friend.
    Best always,
    mystic


  • Logans-Mommy
    July 31, 2007
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    awww this is cute.


  • The Poetic Angel
    July 28, 2007
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    awsome i love the ending ...congrats on the gold shiney well deserved xxx cheeky xxx


  • fathom me
    July 26, 2007

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    What do I say? Can't stop smiling.. Enjoyed this mini trip very much
    Hope you're doing well

  • Eulb kcalB
    July 26, 2007

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    you deserved that trophy girl , this piece is wonderful , left me feeling all wistful and soft. I love it girl!!! keep up the good work there


  • Beating gold member
    July 26, 2007

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    ooh! congratulations on winning gold on this. You really deserve it. This piece is so sweet and so original. I really love it, and the part about smiling thank you back to the prints is my favourite. So ever sweet!


    • Wolf Mistress silver member
      July 26, 2007
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      Thank you for your sweet commentYou know comments like this are the sting to go on writing


  • wattle silver member
    July 25, 2007

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    Oh wow, how tender, Ms Wolfy you are just a lamb under that costume you wear for personal protection. You really are a poet's poet, thank you.


  • Lillian Rose
    July 25, 2007

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    This is a really good write. I liked how it's not cliche but different. Something from the heart and soemthing the readers can relate to. I loved how you used the footprints in the sand too. Thank you for entering my contest and best of luck to you!


    Casey


  • sunny day
    July 24, 2007

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    Oh my, this is very beautiful and filled with such imagery. That last stanza and last line really got to me. You filled this with such emotion and I love the picture you chose to go with it, although even without it would have presented just such an image. I want to thank you for sharing this one and wish you all the best in the contest with it. Kudos for such a wonderful use of the title. Love and God bless you my friend, Joyce


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    July 23, 2007

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    So much emotion you put into your words. I was right there with you as I read this. Very beautiful write hun.

    Jeannie


  • Poetic Tasha Moderators member
    July 23, 2007

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    Beautifully sad...

    your words are getting more and more beautiful with each piece that you write. this is very touching to say the least. i love it as with everything you write


  • Debbie Hansman
    July 23, 2007

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    Such beautiful words written...my heart felt all the emotions deep within it...the saddness, the love. The footprints is an amazing touch with the ocean and water.
    Very sad...but BEAUTIFUL to me!

    debbie


  • DJ Harley silver member
    July 23, 2007

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    a very lovely heart felt poem wolf i like the part standing in a trance by the ocean, the ocean can do to you. good luck in the contest

    John


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    July 23, 2007

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    You will always be in my heart...Footprints in the sand...shivers of love entice me...forever on the heart...Found myself sighing that at least the memories will remainThank you for sharing my sister

    • Wolf Mistress silver member
      July 23, 2007
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      That's so true...the memories nobody can steal from us
      Thnxs for your lovely comments..they mean a lot to me
      XXJeannette

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