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Can you keep a little secret?
do you promise not a word
The next time you see mummy
Do you promise little bird?
If she asks you if you’ve seen me
please be careful what you say
Just tell her when you saw me
I was happy in my play
Don’t mention you had seen me
out here playing on a cloud
I am sure it would upset her
She wont know that it’s allowed
Tell her I was skipping puddles
running wildly in the rain
Or pick wild poppies
from the hedge down Cherry lane
Please don’t tell her I was flying
like a bluebird in the sky
Weaving in and out a rainbows
she don’t know that I can fly
Or say that you had seen me
underneath the apple tree
Making chains from out of daisies
like she always did with me
For she’s bound to ask you questions
when that moment should arrive
Be careful what you tell her
as she thinks I’m still alive
It is natures way of coping
to relieve her of the pain
For it took the bitter memories
and it wiped them from her brain
Next time she asks you questions
do I have you at your word
You wont tell her I’m in heaven
Do you promise little bird
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Author notes
If you read and comment please do not use my name So to keep this contest anonymous Thank you
A contest entry
- Angels come in all shapes and sizes, Picture inspired by tawk.
700 points, ended July 28, 2007, 9 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Favorites (Invite Only) by Lj-.
600 points, ended August 29, 2008, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Turn that silver to gold pt 8 by whispernthedark.
400 points, ended September 27, 2008, 17 entries
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Comments
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Hoodwinked!
Wow...and again I say wow. This piece is beautiful! And the picture is gorgeous too. You took this picture and described it in a beautiful way even though it is sad. The rhyming was awesome too. Great job dear poet..and Keep it up.
Always write from the heart
Never give up
Kate
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very beautiful... wonderful interpretation of the picture. thank you for entering the contest, good luck.
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whisper
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This is really sweet. The rhyme was really great.
I like how you began with a question; it draws the reader in.
Thank you for your entry,
Best of luck!
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sweet and heartwarming
Sir it's purely magical the way you pen a story!Imagery was spot on and on a side note I was reminded of an uncle of mine who used a phrase similar to this angel's about keeping a secret when we saw him out in the streets!Another great one!good luck w/ the contest.
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The words are so comforting and sweet, but the story behind these words is so touching and sad. No one would have the heart to hurt this little angel of love and innocence.
This poem is greatly amazing, and the picture is as beautiful as the writing.
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Thank you Beanbiscuit It is always a pleasure to get such comments from another poet.It tend to justify ones work. Thank you for taking the time to do so
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Absolutely-Beautiful
Awesome Poem, Indeed!!! I Should Have Had My Kleenex, Near Me!! Sadly, Beautiful, And It Really Tocuhed MY Heart! Great Emotion, In A Softly Spoken Way.....Loved It!'God Bless You In Every Way'!.Love, Shirley ann shaw-raytown,mo...........................
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Thank you Shirley for taking time to red and comment on this poem I am so pleased that you found it an enjoyable read Thank you for doing so
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This was so sweet and it was sad. Beautiful and amazing full of heart and love true peace and love.
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Thank you Lelove it is always pleasing to hear from a fellow poet how they feel about your work. Thank you for taking time to read and comment I really do appreciate it Thank you Take care
Legend
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This is so beautiful
This precious angel is truly looking out for her mother's well being. It is perfect.
Patty
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The chills do run rampant in my body, this is a joy of a write. How you express such a story from the sight that we all see is astonishing.
and how you relate to all our hearts in the compassion of a little child for her mother, ahh i loved it.
four thumbs way up.
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Thank you for your comments That it moved you to write such words is more than enough for this poet. Thank you so much I really do appreciate it
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Two thumbs up!
Absolutely beautiful Legend. I'm at a loss for words. (And that doesn't often happen). This poem gave one the feel that they were really being let in on a secret. Hmm.. I see you got a silver for this one. Well-deserved... though your work always merits a gold in my opinion.
Marissa.
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Hi Marissa so nice to hear from you Thank you so much for such wonderful comments. It is always pleasing to know that others have enjoyed what you have written Thank you
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This is so heart breaking to read. It will move any heart to tears..touching and beautiful..congrats on the win.
Take care
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Thank you meena krish I am pleased to know that you enjoyed this one As i am with all the other comments you have made on my work Thank you so much
Take care
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...you're choking all of AP up
with your wonderful and sad poetry. This is truly amazing and so very tender, had me in tears after the second stanza... I knew exactly where you were going with this. It surely is the winner, if not I'll show my bum in the co-op window again 
So very, very well done. A definite pearla!
Shaz xx
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Hi Shaz not my intentions to clog up AP with tears not after all the rain we have had here.This image just asked to have such words put to it.That you think i found the right ones is more that a pleasure to read Thank you so much
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Beautifully done as always my friend. Left me in tears this morning. Oh my. Just wonderful. ~Pamela
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Fantastic as usual! Your rhyme and flow is flalwss, absolutely perfect! I loved this and all the best in the contest!
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WOW!
this is amazing i dont even have words. it braught me to tears. You better win this contest this was amazing great job!
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Another super write!
Your talent seems endless, (don't be embarrassed!) did this take long to write? Enjoyed very much, perfect for the picture. I think you will have more thingies to polish!! WASP.
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Simply Amazing! I love how you bring to life, the supposition that children can truly "see" both "sides". And I love how tender "Father" is with daughter. There is a special bond between a father and a daughter especially, and this poem really shows. And the coping mechanisms of someone who has lost their other half, the one that "completed" them, can truly make someone desparate enough to just "not beleive" it ever took place. I really really love this one.
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One of the most beautiful and emotionally written poems I have ever read. here or anywhere else. I take my hat off to you mate for this is one of the most sensitive poems imaginable. A perfect poem for the painting .. Oh mate, Bravo !!!
Barry
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Legend my friend, What have I told you about making me cry. This is so absolutely wonderful.The words here would melt even the coldest heart....So unique , The background picture just adds to the emotion felt through this exceptional write...good luck with this one,,,you won't need it though I'm sure...mal
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Oh my........
Legend, you have such a way of touching the heart with your words...Not only do you use the power of emotion but added to that is the flawless accompanymant of rhyme and flow and it's then like a symphony playing heartstrings.....and mine are being strummed.....
Touching....so beautiful....
Lynda
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Touching image and the words you have added to compliment it are just incredible. Spoken from the heart of a child (and there is one still hiding in most of us) but the ending is beautifully woven, so much love in this from the child to her Mother. Incredibly emotional.
Von
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Oh, this is so beautiful and touching. I am in tears as I read this. Such beauty and peace you have woven with your wonderful words. Excellent flow and imagery Good luck in the contest What a amazing take on the picture.
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Absolutely amazing but from you I would expect nothing else. Your works are always nothing short of brilliance and as always it was a sheer delight to read. Good luck!
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Wow! I know we don't share the same beliefs-but you're pretty convincing here. Have you ever seen the movie "The 6th Sense"? This reminded me of that-you don't realize who is dead until the very end-blows your mind. But back to your write-just pulls at your heartstrings. We lost our second child and I wld often dream of her and I cld just imagine this being a poem to me. I wld wake up and be convinced she was still here and then the sad realization wld set in and the tears wld start all over.
You have to be one of my favorite poets on this site and I'm sure anyone can see why. Beautiful-look forward to your next~
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